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Miracles, Like Rain

Bitter-Sweet The Gift (Ottava Rima)

At times the sting of death comes much too soon
and leaves within its wake a painful choice,
through the veil of mourning’s black, a des’prate tune
from those in need of gifts without invoice.
To freely give this dower opportune
is miracle indeed and we rejoice.
To donate life- a precious bond is made;
a hope of blessings full so grief is swayed.

 

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An Infinite When (Freeverse)

 

When was it the world dried out

and I didn’t notice it crack

under my feet?

green melodies faded

into dark trees

 

on my knees, numb

reaching out to yesterday’s ghosts

finding only stiff sticks

dehydrated bones, abandoned

 

and prostrate, I died.

 

leaving essence in the circling,

carrion snatchers eat life

and thrive on despair

 

sinking into never

dust echoed, shimmered-

a mirage of hope

that drew my heart

without a home

 

a thirst-swelled tongue

mumbled your name,

wind whisked my final cry

to the sky

where ears of angels wait

 

but unheard, my cry fell

and snagged

on your bruised branch

where breath rushed in-

flood of a saving spring

 

I clung, admiring

 the green buds offered,

unfettered, unafraid

and became lichen

though you pushed me to grow

I dared not in hostile earth

 

and I cried

for death is painful

and necessary

 

you hummed a humble tune

to my soul

and brought the rain-

precious drops of rebirth

awakening new shoots

in desolate plots

 

I learned your song-

notes dancing on a new staff

setting music free to ring.

 

When was it the grass

turned carpet on the land

and flourished through my hand?

 

Never mind,

I rejoice in the rain.

 

 

 

Author notes

http://allpoetry.com/Nickelspring

We will conclude with two poems written together. One must be free verse and the other must be an Ottava Rima.

Prompt: Miracles

Notes:
(Ottava Rima)
At this year's annual picnic of MUSC's celebration of transplant donors/recipients, a woman told of her 12 yr old son who went with his father to the DMV where it came up about being an organ donor. After the father explained what that was all about, the son said he would do that without doubt. Within 2 weeks the son contracted viral menangitis and lapsed into a coma and was pronounced brain dead. His parents, though devastated with grief, decided to honor his wishes and donated his organs. 5 desperate families received this precious gift.
3 years ago my father was dying and after extensive testing and preparation was put on the transplant list for a new liver. We waited all of 6 hours when a liver became available and my father received it well and is doing great. Not much is known of his donor other than it was a young man who was lost tragically in a motorcycle accident. Him and his family remain annonymous, as their wish. It was such a bitter-sweet blessing to us- my father received the gift of life, yet we knew at the same time, somewhere, a family was mourning the loss of their son.
(btw, my father was never a drinker, we believe his cirrhosis was due to Hepatitus)

(Freeverse)
Just a personal write honoring a special friend.

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  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    November 16
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    Kris, this is such an unusual and personal theme, and you have endowed it with all your usual grace and lyricism. Both the ottava rima and the freeverse are beautifully written and a wonderful addition to this contest. I am pleased that your father was able to be helped by this gift, and I recognize the bittersweet feelings you have knowing that this gift was preceded by a loss. You made me feel the entire experience. Thank you for this beautiful entry. Peace, Liz


    • Nickelspring gold member
      November 17
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      Thank you for a wonderful rounds contest! It had interesting, thought provoking prompts and fair judging. It was a pleasure taking part and reading the other entries.
      Thank you for the honor of silver
      Kris

  • ea silver member
    November 3

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    I was struck by the first, formal poem about organ donation because I don't think I've ever read one before. We considered this ourselves last year for my dad because a living donor has a better chance of success with kidneys and people are even volunteering anonymous donations. It's always so moving to hear of this taking place, like between that principal and the 5th grade student last year; doesn't have the conflict involved with receiving a cadaver donation, though what brave people step forth on both sides of this to give and receive. Good luck in the contest and also with your novel writing this month!

    • Nickelspring gold member
      November 3
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      Thank you so much! Yes, at the picnic the live donors were asked to stand so we could applaud them, they sheepishly stood- what heroes! Its an amazing thing, something I would consider a miracle. I cried through most of the program, Im such a softee. But out of a tragic loss, my father is now healthy. He is a counsellor to people with emotional and situational stress, so he has used this gift to serve others.

      Nano is going slow... but that's ok it gets me writing and that's what counts!!
      Thank you for a lovely comment!
      Kris


  • Nymphetemine
    November 1

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    Wow ... I loved both of the writes my dearest poet.. The second poem well I was blown away by the sheer depth of feelings and imagary.. Yes I am biased.. But I do know that you are a wonderfully talented writer..if only you would believe it.. I wish you good luck for the contest...


    • Nickelspring gold member
      November 1
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      Thank you, my dear friend, I truly appreciate your support and lovely comments!

      Kris

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