Gesticulating at the speck of sheer joy
which sprang somewhere in my mind
I held the aroma strong and alive
as my nostrils flickered on reception
It was unmistakably her
She had tip toed in the room
when I was closed eyes
and praying to powers that be!
I had prayed and prayers were answered
Each man needs a particular woman
whether he is happy or in woe
as a foil and confidant
whether in relation
or otherwise.
Here she was
making my day
after that pray
She came from behind
and enveloped me in those pretty arms
her perfume invading me
and making me calm.
I looked in her eyes
so deep and blue
like ocean's depth
as mine ,with joy, a little wept
I nestled my head on her shoulders
letting her brown mein
calm me with touch
she was a soul solace as such.
She slowly picked my chest
where she let her palm rest
and felt my heart
palpitate from a gallop to a trot
she had that way
to hold me in any pace and sway
in each other's arms
we derived nectar
like one
and stayed like that
for hours.
When she did separate
it was only physical divide
her soul and its
peace I had stolen
and she smiled
I love you
you,my thief!
Author notes
you,my thief!
3) Read the lyrics/youtube the following 3 songs... they were played at her funeral, let me know how they make you feel:
Katherine Jenkins - Amazing grace.
A contest entry
- Happy? by Sonya-Erasmus.
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This isn't really what I am looking for. I want something angrier lol something not about love about getting over it. but it is a nice poem!
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You described her steali ng your heart very nicely!
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congradulations
you have found a moment of forever, a second of pure joy, a fraction of happiness. I'm quite jeleous. very nice work.....chael
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This is a wonderful write!
So sweet and sincere.
It captures the beauty of love and respect.
Best of luck
Love
Sonya -
I like that
This is soft, gentle and sweet. I love the line she was a soul solace as such. beatfully done sweetly written. Fantastic job!
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Fantastic!!!
This is beautiful its like every sence comes to life you can feel the hair, smell the perfume and taste the moment. Wonderfully written I luv it!! TB.x
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amazing write!
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I like the sometimes rhymes, and the way you show love without telling it.
Very nicely written.
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a damn good write
Never ever had inclination towrds mushy poems..as am long past that...but this made me look up and sit.A very mature take on affection and deep young love.Well done a structure that was fantastic -
A wonderful write sweety
Well enjoyed but a little sad when you lose a loved one. And you only want her back so you can feel her near. Keep writing sweety I always enjoy your writes. This is my favorite stance;
"I looked in her eyes
so deep and blue
like ocean's depth
as mine ,with joy, a little wept
I nestled my head on her shoulders
letting her brown mein
calm me with touch
she was a soul solace as such."
hugs
an love Your AP Mom Lisa 
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Love inclined poems have never sparked intrest in my, they still don't. So if I sound demeaning when I comment, it's not a fault of the poem, blame it on the topic.
The first thing I noticed was strong imagery. Your wordchoice was fantastic, you constantly hit the right words giving the poem the proper feel. Also, I liked how you explored more than 1 of the senses, it really gives the reader the sense that they're there.
The rhyme, I love it. I don't see a particular scheme, but when it's just thrown there, it sounds awesome.
Extremely well-written, but not the type of poem I would like
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Interesting. You might wanna leave out the last line "you,my theif" it is already the title of the poem and it will leave the poem a little bit more finished. But all in all i loved it. My favorite lines were
I looked in her eyes
so deep and blue
like ocean's depth
as mine ,with joy, a little wept
Keep on writing!
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This was very enjoyable. A lovely and sweet ode to a beautiful woman. =} wonderful writing.
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omg hon i really love this poem it takes my breath away!!! Very wonderfully written i love how you ended keep on writing!
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Delightful
very descriptive and sensual and a delight to read, sometimes our prayers are answered, keep it flowing
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I Love It
Heartfelt and powerful words that touch my heart...she is a very lucky girl indeed
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