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All We Need is Love




As I lay there, in the dark,
I recall believing that all we need
is this love. This feeling
of fisted shirts and frenzied fuck-me moments
'neath a milky moon;

and my sigh echoed the soft of your snore.

I wanted to get up. To write something brilliant
'bout the way you make me feel. How
the woman in me is birthed from your command;

but you were holding on, so tight.

This morning you remain in the land of dreams,
as I feed self-claimed starving children,

who fight over who gets the last of the cereal;

 

and I smile, knowing our life is far from perfection,

but baby, it is close enough for me.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 












 

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  • sgking123 gold member
    November 5

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    loved these lines all so much.The poem was so good.

    of fisted shirts and frenzied fuck-me moments
    'neath a milky moon;

    and my sigh echoed the soft of your snore.

    Check mine if you do wish.


  • crivanea silver member
    November 3

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    sweet..true..honest...beautiful...a poem that tells much of the poetress herself...wonderfully done.. love read from you

  • pkoirish
    November 2

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    wonderfully sad

    I loved the way you started this piece..
    As I lay there, in the dark,
    I recall believing that all we need
    is this love. This feeling
    of fisted shirts and frenzied fuck-me moments
    'neath a milky moon;

    Great stanza to start....


  • Riftkin gold member
    November 2

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    A true love story that shows us that love in every day life is more precious than simple romance.

    Thank you for entering and best of luck to you with it.

    Riftkin


  • Nicolette gold member
    November 1

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    yes, as long as you feel the love, even with its little imperfections, then all is well. loved the aura that surrounds this poem. lovely

    ~ Nicolette


  • tara wilson gold member
    November 1

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    that is all you need, yes. nothing is ever perfect - but as long as there is love, that's close enough. well said & a beautiful poem.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    November 1

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    Now this is just one of the sweetest writes I've read in a while
    Life is far from perfect but you're content...that's just...yeah, sweet!
    Wishing you the best of all there is, hon!
    Hugs,
    Sandy

  • Rowan gold member
    November 1

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    awww...
    sounds like a lovely morning hon...
    lol.

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