I shut out the light of your careless replies,
why don't you come sit by me-
in the corner where I release myself,
waiting for the fairytale to end-
and reality to begin.
I swore this would crush me-
and we fell from the high pedestal,
you didn't even try to save me,
whilst I faded like the ones before me,
which you promised didn't matter.
"I chose every word I knew could hurt,"
to counter your poor excuses,
and I watch my days fade away,
my loneliness bury me,
and before I know,
I'm left behind-
not liking what I have become.
Just Like Before
xx As hell greets you my friend.
Author notes
Well this is the first time i have written in ages. So i hope it doesn't suck too bad. If you read this i would appreciate the extra 2 mins to comment and tell me what you think 
and even better have a bit of a converse with me i love to chat
As the great Bob Dylan said, "All I can do is be me, whoever that is."
A contest entry
- Love/ Teen Crushes -------> whether you love it or hate it by Grey.Area..
700 points, ended November 1, 13 entries
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They say what doesn't kill us makes us stronger - probably true, though it doesn't make the pain any easier when we're suffering. The trick is to defend your self-esteem before anything else. The problem is well explained in your poem.
btw.: 'pedalstool' did you mean 'pedestal' ? Hope you don't mind the question.
Mike
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crap i think your write. i was ages debating it lol, silly spell check is good for nothing
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You never fail to proove why you are one of my favourite allpoetry writers.
Really really well written, I love the image it leaves the reader with.
X
Dani.
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I Agree Awsome Write....
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Great
Love it... it's great! Keep it up. I even still feel like this sometimes; sadly.
you should try some optimistic ones? For me?
your friend
gray. -
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just for you hun i will try something optimistic even though its not my forte
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love it love it
Good job. Totally relate-able to
This si my favourite section:
I watch my days fade away,
my loneliness bury me,
and before I know,
I'm left behind-
not liking what I have become.
Just Like Before
This is so intense, I love it awesome.
Love sucks
well for me at the mo.
Good luck
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I really love this!!
It completely wraps you in it! It's quick, and I have certainly lived this! Certainly lived the shame of love win, love lied and then love lost. It always leaves me untouched. I wonder sometimes if I'll ever get better. If I'll ever love myself.
You have inspired me. Thank you.
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