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Facade

Stand tall
Walk like you own
Whatever's with you
They'd never know

Sit poised
Smile like you're content
With life and its helpings
They'd still believe

Smile true
Like tears never ran
Through those vacant eyes
For they can never tell

Peer through
Those rosy tinted glasses
But that cool haze, remember
Is never the real hue.



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  • taoareyou
    November 3

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    I like the concept but the first three stanza's imply the person is aware of the facade yet the last one suggests they need to be reminded of it. Just feels a little disjointed to me. On a "lighter" note, the text needs to be a little lighter.


  • happy kitty kat
    November 3

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    "Stand tall
    Walk like you own
    Whatever's with you
    They'd never know" this was my favorite part. eerie is it not?


  • Kastor
    November 2
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    Kinda thick you think?