I bought a bottle marked "holy water";
set to redemption,
yet it was just straight from the tap
and that's when I found myself
~questioning
[naked in a field of trees is where I met heaven]
Author notes
“We buy our way out of jail but we can't buy freedom,
We buy a lot of clothes when we don't really need them,
Things we buy to cover up what's inside.”
- K.W.
30-60 words
A contest entry
- something of a quicke 4; just write. by Tzipora.
550 points, ended November 6, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Hummmm,... I love the last line,.. but I'm unsure where your muse was....Gonna have to ponder on this one,..
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Brilliant
It took me a while to get its meaning, very deep and true indeed -
damn, this was good.
thank you for entering. -
wowww, great entry : )
i love the title here because it really placed an emphasis on certain words for me, such as "holy water", "redemption", and "questioning". I particularly loved the last line. lovvvvvvvved it! good luck : )
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