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Morning After

 


I often wondered
if we really floated at dawn's eyes opening

or was it just the feeling
I had from the fall I felt as I hit the dusk before.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • NeanderthalMan
    November 1

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    The beginning had a "mystical" feel to it, but the second stanza seems completely different and takes away from rhythmic flow from the start...maybe a more mysterious second stanza would accentuate the start.

  • acalmingvoice
    November 1

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    Hummm,.. Makes me wonder where your thoughts are,... life is full of ups & downs,...The only thing I know for sure is its a beautiful ride with a friend like you ! Love ya to the moon & back !!! me.

  • n.e.o.n gold member
    November 1

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    I agree, some really amazing imagery here. I also liked the concept. It's nice to see some very original pieces. I liked this. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • DecorusApparatus
    November 1

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    Fascinating imagery here... this concept is fantastic. Very original, which I love.
    This is something special.
    Good luck to you.
    --Katie.