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Mmm...

Slurping it up,
drinking it down,
washing it off
sign then frown.

A fabulous ferocious feast.
Silky, and made for a beast.

Dark like mud -
my greatest bud -
tasted this blood.

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Happy Halloween!

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  • dragonfly89
    November 1

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    Good...

    but i would consider revising the line " Silky, and made for a beast" something throws the flow off. I like the format though Looking forward to seeing your final product.