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Surge of the Sea

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I will be your harbor when you come home 
from the sea, salty and worn;  I will shelter you 

from fog that slowly descends on quiet, starless nights.

 

You'll feel currents surge as you nestle within my arms,

replacing this longing you might feel for the bitter blue.

 

I will be your hearth, comforting and warm -

fire blazing, embers banked against the fallen.

There will be no tempests to contend with here - 

the storms are safely outside this dream as we dance,
embracing shadows by flickering candlelight.
 

 

 

 

II.

 

 

You feast upon my fiery flesh, drawing breath from my bones - 

it hovers over us as an unrelenting sigh.

You whisper my name, a litany of desire -

unfathomable depths consume us in a whirlpool of wonder,
immersed in the ebb and flow of ache and arch.

 

Like water mirrored upon the sated earth, 
evaporated by a hungry sun, I am carried into the clouded sky -

released again as rain pouring upon the soft petals of wildflowers,
quenching their thirst for growth, a subtle scent of passion
emanating from fields of glory,
lost within your embrace and found within your smile.

 

In shadows' depths, I rhythm poems within your love -

you hear me within your heartbeat,

answered by your searching mouth. 

 

 

 

III.

 

 

Wildly stirred waves of wonder dwell within these storm-struck eyes.

You whisper oceans into my blood and we are dancing in deep water,
saturated beyond salvation's gasp. Inhaling each other's songs,
we break the surface of dreams, descended from paradise.

Echoes rhythm our bones, a lucid whirlwind -

lingering light in your eyes grew dark as you reached out,
drawing me near, creating us anew.

We are bowed beneath this bountiful gravity, 

this ethereal lifting of wings, 

weaving ribbons around our flickering flames - I linger,

thoughts unwrapped by this dream, lost in a fragment of time.


Moonlight wanes, drifts across silk rising for your touch.

Sudden stars beckon brightly, pale beside your luminous eyes.

I cannot speak - I cannot even whisper the truth of this moment
that returns again and again, gripping my heart

with the furies of unabated fire.

We lay stunned by this ferocity,
its vivid depictions of what might be, let unleashed.

I am besieged - shuddering, tethered by tenderness. 

Bereft with beauty's boldness, I moan. My soul shivers 

as we explore these depths, shadows and light twining,
swirling together in tempestuous space. 

 

You gather my hair, winding me close.
I touch your hand, trembling.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


 

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  • michael thomas gold member
    November 11
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    Rich expansive poem. Best I have read.


  • Stuart Higginson gold member
    November 9

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    I love the word “litany”. It reminds me of the poets, bards and troubadours of old!  The opening staza captured me instantly, and I enjoyed the contrast between our two entries' first stanzas ... my first-person was the recipient of electrification and enlivenment and stimulation from the outset, while yours offers a sanctuary, shelter ... calm and a harbour from one's labours and their return home. Then the warmth of loving flames, before becoming fiery and consuming in the second vignette, spirited to wildflower fields, which surely could equal if not be the Meadows of Heaven ... and beyond, so far beyond, on so many voyages and journeys into and between the voids of shadow and light, to the place where you both and the voids become one twining vortex of the perfect stasis.

    "Tethered by tenderness" ... a wonderful expression in the climax that is the penultimate stanza, and then a befitting, beautiful end, as the temporal becomes once more apparent, and from passion's paradise your partings come.

    I wasn't sure whether I was permitted stanzas in a tri-vignette poem, now I wish I had read yours first, lol!!!!  

    Stellar stuff, Wanda, once again and evermore! 


  • Nom de Plume
    November 4

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    love the finish to this first off... wraps it in beauty and sensuality, which flows through the whole piece... your imagery is soft and delicate, building to the final crescendo of the ending... enjoyed this, wish you luck too


  • meic
    November 1

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    This is truly marvellous in every respect - sheer craft, linguistic richness and - above all - a true appreciation of all the phases of passion. There is no weak passage in the whole piece and each section flows effortlessly into the next. It is a poem which requires reading a few times - and at least one reading aloud - to get the full impact. Wonderful.

    Mike


  • annother gold member
    November 1
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    Such an incredible piece this is, it leaves me breathless. Bravo! Thanks so much for the entry, best of luck.


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    November 1

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    Wow, how dynamic a write. It moves Beloved as it moves sea, this satiated feeling that comes of love. I thought I would find you here as I check for contests with some bones to gnaw on.


  • Danny Beatty gold member
    November 1

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    you have got three gears in this poem ... the first gear is the 'flirtation' the 'daydream' the 'promise to yourself to give to him' ... the second gear is the act of making love and the third gear, I read, as numerous orgasms .. in the first canon the fifth line is my favorite, for it gives the lover a better place to escape to than through some idiot dream of freedom .. the second canon is the act of making love, as the first line of the second canon makes it potently clear, especially in the second phrase where this becomes deep and aching ... the third canon is orgasm and recognition of the lovers' of each other as separate yet unified within the other, as in the first line again ... I like the way you do this, with the first line of the second and third canons. My favorite line in the entire poem is the fourth line of the fourth stanza of the third canon ...'Bereft with beauty's boldness, I moan. My soul shivers'
    to grieve with joy is a fantastic concept, trite, if not properly given birth, profound in the hands of a true poet, as here. My favorite part of the poem is the ending couplet. It is a poem unto itself and a rapid, sudden change of pace, like breathing happily and sweaty staring into the moon.

    onto my power poetry list this goes

  • michael thomas gold member
    October 31

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    Three sections of the greatest words of love I have ever read. You must feel enervated after writing this. It must fill you up with wonder that you have to power to assemble such beauty on a page.

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