i.
we're both a little awkward i guess...
maybe you're just not as confident as you would like to be. i feel the same way (even if I don't show it) but I do like the way you talk, and your default/nervous laugh that you do. it's cute.
we're kinda cute.
i wish you didn't live 45 minutes across town
and that I didn't have swimming 7days a week.
i wish 60 minutes was longer so that i could see you for more than just the lunch hour.
i watch the clock like a nervous wreck, often disappointed to know that only 2 minutes have passed since the last glance and there are still 57 minutes left of class.
i feel better knowing that you're close by doing the same thing.
the directions say this should be about you...and it is. I just feel that you are made of wishes in my mind and little things, like how molecules stack together to form something bigger- something tangible.
you click with me.
where i struggle, you thrive,
perhaps even as cliché
as[puzzle][pieces].
ii.
in the three short weeks that have been our mutual awareness of existing, my being has come to know happiness like never before.
i'm not sure if being around a person has ever made me feel this happy.
it's a good feeling to know.
kind of like finding out that not all boys are jerks
or that losing sleep because of love is actually not as cheesy as it sounds
you're kind of like autumn.
a bright burst a colour against a crips blue sky
(just like the blue eyes you stare at me with)
something eye catching
that has subtle ways of changing
and although leaves are falling
they scatter the warm colours underfoot and envelop the world in the a sun-like light.
i wish i could describe kisses and small magic moments like them
but we're not there yet.
we're like the last two leaves on the tree just waiting for the right time to fall so we can meet on a different level.
even though you started off longing for someone else
maybe you were really just being pulled in my direction
we have more in common than i thought.
and just like Ben sings in transatlantisism
i need you so much closer
Author notes
Prompt:
Two poems
the first about the person you love
and the second being the things
you've come to realize about this person.
20 lines each ish
Well Chris... are you sure you wanted to read this?
for all of you who are not understanding the last two lines
its a Death Cab For Cutie reference
to both the lead singing
and possibly my favourite song by them
♥Kat
A contest entry
- With a hand on your heart. by e m i l y.
900 points, ended November 18, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Any ways i could have possibly make this any better?
Comments
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I really like this write. Made me think to when I was back in HS, and how class felt like so long before you could see your b/f lol. Cute. Thanks for sharing.
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story of my life
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Ben sings in transatlantisism
-well der. what other kind of reference was it going to be? hands off. he's mine. that was my favourite song they performed live. i remember it so well
this was very fun to read. 'default/nervous voice' rocked all.
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some people just don't know DCFC (which is a crime but....)
and he's allllll yours.
and i reallly really really want to go see them! jealous that you did.
glad you liked it
Kat
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Ah, Kat, you've done it again!
you're kind of like autumn.
a bright burst a colour against a crips blue sky
(just like the blue eyes you stare at me with)
something eye catching
that has subtle ways of changing
and although leaves are falling
they scatter the warm colours underfoot and envelop the world in the a sun-like light.
Your poem gave me butterflies.
I like this stanza because, well, fall is amazing and it
does amazing things when you compare it to a person you adore.
The only suggestion I have is maybe use stronger statements,
instead of "You're kind of like" I'd say "You are like".
I guess it would depend on the mood you're trying to set though.
Nevertheless, fantastic job.
(Aw, I wrote my boyfriend a poem the other day and he couldn't appreciate it, because he's not good with words...or depth. haha.)
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Thanks emily
lol the boy read it (and joined AP just so he could comment)
and ya.
he bookmarked it >.<
fall = ♥ in more ways than one
I think i got the mood i was looking for.
Its not supposed to be super direct since we're both kind of awkward.
but thanks for the suggestion
lol I think he appreciates my work too much
thanks again
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Amazing
Im extreamly sure i wanted to read that. That was... amazing -
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well... thanks for the millionth time
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