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Replaceable

I never thought I’d find someone like you,
a stranger with words that seemed so true.

In you my soul found a true mate,
you helped me open the heaven’s gate.

But like all fairytales, our came to an end,
you were never further from being my friend.

Broken-hearted and in tears, I realized fast
that what we had wasn’t meant to last.

Now you are completely free,
so tell me, why can’t I be?

I can almost taste the long gone days,
everywhere I look I see your face.

I want this haunting to stop once and for all
and need back my mind, my life and soul.

But no matter what, you are still here,
living as a memory a little too dear.

You don’t deserve my smile, not even a frown.
I won’t give you the pleasure of seeing me drown.

For once, the truth is visible –
all that time I was replaceable.

You were so quick to leave me behind
and I thought you were one of a kind.

I’ve got something to say, hope you don’t mind:
In this story, honey, you’re the one who’s blind.

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I am replaceable to him, but it's definitely mutual.

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  • Ez Writer silver member
    November 17
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    A sad but true poem and story ,
    sometimes love is blind but in
    this case you saw through him
    you weren't blind , he was ...
    Best wishes & hugs , friend Easy


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    November 14

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    wow Nela, you have penned a beautiful powerful
    piece and the strength from this poem is just
    awesome!!!

    love and blessings

    Rend


  • Palas Kumar Ray
    November 11

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    Your style has been always my favorite in AP.I wonder how beautifully you rhyme with the bitterest experience of life!I know how do you feel 'cause I had been traveling that blind lane for years.I understand how painful it is to fall prey of our own disobedient heart.
    Hats off to your bravery for most aptly dealing with the most delicate threads of emotion.

  • sotanosister
    November 8

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    I love how you write, Nela. From the heart. I am sorry for your pain, but you are doing something very creative with it. You are healing; it's just hard to see when you're so close to it. And when you find that you have grown and feel love more deeply than you had ever thought possible, you will look back and see that experiences like what you write about helped you to get to this new place you now find yourself. In the end it's all for good. Hang in there and keep writing.
    Sis


  • red rose
    November 6

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    Wooooooooow dear
    every words wrote here .They changd my feeling
    really it so amazing dear
    I like this line
    "You don’t deserve my smile, not even a frown.
    I won’t give you the pleasure of seeing me drown"


  • songstress80
    November 4

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    a job very well done. i've definately been in that position before. you do everything and they guy seems to be the one and then he turns into a whole different guy that you don't even know. it's like a dr. jekyll and mr. hyde disease. he gets what he wants from you and then makes you happy for a certain amount of time and then *BANG* it hits you like a freight train. and you never saw it coming. all the feelings of love turn into hate. your feelings of betrayl are very strong here. very powerful write. excellently done. if you are replaceable to someone, then that person is not worth your time. the truth is that you are irreplaceable. you are a special person in your own right. no one has the right to treat you like that. thanks for sharing how you feel about your experience.


  • freddiepoe
    November 3
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    Very good!! I love how it flowed and the ending was magic!!

    Well done


  • awannabepoet
    November 2

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    Excellent way to put it in the end, sorry it took me this long to notice you had a new poem posted.

    I love how you told the truth from the very begining until the bitter end.

  • DonutNinja
    November 1

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    I enjoyed this

    I think one of the opstacles to sincere love is not to let a person pollute your heart and love for them with there deeds.Ive only ever had one girlfriend and every once in a while I kick myself for letting her go, but Id rather have that to look with scron upon another human being ive been intimate with for even a little while,let alone all my life.
    I enjoyed reading this. i like the emotion. its a worth while read


  • spiritual wolf
    October 31

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    But like all fairytales, our came to an end,
    you were never further from being my friend.

    very powerful part.i love everything about this write bc i just went through this myself and it says things i couldnt have. mamazing write and my blessings to you.

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