My mother's eyes held nothing for me; they were empty orbs I could not shake.
I think I search for her often when I am asleep by the simple desire i might find her
and whisper dark tangible secrets in the occipital bridge. I might let it rest
in the frontal part of her skull, where it would seep down into her eyes and might
blind her.
She gives me a reason to be bitter towards the world. You understand don't you?
To be so angry at the world you think maybe you should let a blade
slip itself swiftly into your ulnar vein and bleed as if you Von Willebrand's disease?
To be so angry at the world you don't want to return to newborn form.
To be a woman who hates so beautifully. So deeply. That's the woman I wanted to be.
A contest entry
- Introspection: a series-- round four by unraveled.
700 points, ended November 7, 9 entries
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sometimes there is beauty in the frail
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for a long time I felt this way, you penned words that formed
in my mind, i couldnt or didnt have the courage to speak
beautiful penning ..
love and blessings
Rend
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Yes, this is very beautiful. There is such a calm tone that is hard to believe you could hate deeply. It is a quiet, brooding hatred, then. Sometimes it feels so good to hold on negative emotions: they are a source of empowerment, often hard to resist. You tap into that here.
The comment beneath me is correct: you need 'were' or 'had' before "Von Willebrand's disease".
Cassidy
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you're amazing, and i really mean it.
To be so angry at the world you think maybe you should let a blade
slip itself swiftly into your ulnar vein and bleed as if you Von Willebrand's disease?< didnt feel right, for me atleast. but the rest was rediculously amazing. seriously.
your awesome.
much love,
tsaur/oldschool
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Wow, intelligent, and poignant.
Nicely penned dear, it’s good to read you again.
Love,
Mj.
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So nice to see you writing again,missed you C
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