Let your words of poetry be your guide
As it will bring a healing your so well in need of
Instead of allowing blood to stain your passage in life
Simply let your pen fill this void in your mind
Put a pen to paper
and let all the rage out in roaring thunder
As in each lightning strike its markings
Inks blood stain left on paper
You hold the world at your grasp
This to you I promise, as a gifted writer I forsee
All the many poems your heart has bottled up
So open your heart and find my love for thee
Look at your surroundings and those you love
Cause it's within your soul I see and love you most
You have touched me tenderly in many ways
And hold my heart, in your loving hands!
Author notes
I love you dearly my AP daughter, you hold my heart in your hands and my prayers
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Ah, bah! I love you, AP momma...Twas a wonderful write...
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I love the message you sent to her and the words in heart you penned for this gift of light in heart is a blessing from writhing.. awesome dear one hugs always ♥♥
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Oye, dearest. First line..."Let your words of poem..." Is it supposed to be "Let your words of poetry"? That's the only thing I have wrong. A wonderful write, dearest friend...
Loves and hugs!
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Very nicely done, although the first line makes me wonder if you meant
"Let your words of poetry be your guide" Or "Let the words of your poem/poetry be your guide"
"Let your words of poem" just sounds kinda funny to me.
L9 you have an extra space between: world & at
L16 you have a space before the comma instead of after it.
Oyher than those little hiccups I like what you have here, keep up the wonderful work... Scott
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thank you so much for your comment, I did the change as this was written for someone very dear to my heart, I want it just right for her xoxo
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perhaps the last line in the first stanza could end in 'mind'? the third stanza should start 'you hold the world....' not 'your hold'. the third line in the same stanza should read 'bottled up' not bottle up. And i think the last line of that stanza would read better ' so open your heart and find my love for thee' sorry for all the criticisms, i just think with these minor alterations it would be incredible!!
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Thank you very much for your lovely comment, I did do some changes and improvements, I would love to see what you think now, I really appriciate your help in making this a more special poem for her, It was written for my AP daughter, god I love her, So it does hold a special meaning for me, I had to leave earlier to do errands or I would of read it over ty again xoxo
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