A soul can be washed away with the rain.
I gave myself. You gave heartache.
Love can be left alone with its pain.
What I wanted left me regret.
If love is right, why was I wronged?
I sought to be your heart's desire.
You besmirched where I belonged.
Your choice quenched our love's fire.
Now I'm left with a scar of that past,
sorrow proportionate to my passion.
Joy is dead. A shroud has been cast.
My heart feels dreadfully ashen.
Our union should've been our own pinnacle.
But I'm united with my own grief.
Your sin left me feeling so cynical.
Your sin left me on my life's reef.
If one should want my affection
I'm sure fear would make me flinch.
I can expect the coming rejection.
I will be left in another's lynch.
© 10-31-09
Author notes
This is directed at no one. This is written from no particular person's viewpoint. It is about how one's love can be met with a form of abuse, whether in the form of emotional or physical abuse, desertion or infidelity.
Those who have suffered such are left with cynicism, fear and the seeming impossibility to trust again. For them, love will be met with heartache.
Being in a Ministry for Single people I have become aware of many who have endured what I attempted to give a voice. This is my attempt to see it through their eyes, to feel what they have felt and are feeling. I chose to see how their experience with love, being returned in such a way, is as wrong as a lynching.
My hope is that this does not mock their sorrow, but honors it.
How were you left feeling?
Comments
1 - 19 of 19
-
Well, I think you did a good job trying to see this through the eyes of others. Such a commonplace happening - I think everyone is 'burnt' by love at least once - and then develops the 'fear' of opening up to love again.....I honestly believe most everyone holds back a part of themselves, a lack of trust - for fear of being hurt....
nicely done
thank you for your entry
best wishes in the contest
-
-
If One is "Burnt" by Love...
...then it wasn't love!
This is not a portrait of love. It's a depiction of one abused. -
-
so true....
I guess I was thinking that there are so many kinds of 'love' - and one can be hurt by all of them (and one party always loves more than the other, usually; and, sometimes the one who loves the least in the relationship doesn't seem to feel that what they do wrong to hurt the other is abuse......
And also many times one party will feel like they were abused because they were betrayed in some way or another - and I feel there are many, many kinds of abuse.....not just physical.
A very deep write - one that has many angels to ponder!
I still say......nicely done.
best wishes
-
-
The love I refer to is more than emotion.
It's how one treats another. The reason a 'hate crime' is called such is not because of the emotion preceding, but because of what was done to another.
On the other hand I gain nothing from someone emoting. I am loved when one treats me with kindness, patience, mercy, etc.
Then the 'loved one' gains.
-
-
-
-
Ahhh love...
So bitter, so sweet, so evil, so good...
Love is one and all!
Thanks for sharing...Best wishes in the contest and always!
Write on and on...hope to see you return!
and
-
-
I Wouldn' t Call This Love
This is anything but love that I describe here. Love is kindness for another, using one's power for the one loved.
This is a victim of hatred.
-
-
Well Done!
Love would not be love if it was not willing to risk such sorrow, and love is what it is because it can never be forced or demanded. It is a choice we make, and it is what we choose to do and to give, in spite of the great personal risks involved. Love is so much more than what we feel, and for that very reason, it will provoke the most powerful array of emotions one has ever felt.
Well done! I am no longer single, but I certainly identify.
-
The message is clear, that love can bring sorrow if one in the relationship is not totally into it. It can leave a cloud over you and make you wait for the next rejection. Clear message, with hope brought in,
-
-
Thanks for coming back to comment more. It's really appreciated.
-
-
Great flow and rhythem. Makes the poem easy to read and the feel and emotion jump out and make each of us think. Nicely done.
-
love leaves so many rejected
Life does have so much to offer, then creaps get freaky and throw live and love a curve...mac
-
An amazing write. You captured the pain and resulting fear of the repetition in a very poignant way. Well done my friend!
-
-
It's Appreciated...
I finished this feeling very grief- stricken. I woke up this morning still feeling the grief.
I believe I care very deeply about someone who feels like this. We've talked about this person. I suspect I see that person and others make choices based on that grief and fear. It's almost gut-wrenching.
-
-
wow. i loved the rhythm of this piece. i'm feeling very anti love at the moment to be honest but i liked the emotion in this piece. thank you for sharing.
-
-
If your comment is based on relating to my write I can only understand. It shouldn't be this way but it's unlawfully common.
Thanks for taking the time...
-
-
Bravo
This sad write, my friend, DEFINITELY honors those of us who have been there, or are there now. Because of the very thing you've written about, here, I've come to that place where I can no longer abide the thought of someone in my life. For me, personally, I'm as tired of the "drama" as I am of the pain. The good news, though, is that I've come to trust the Lord in a whole different way. (After all, I have to admit that most of those cases of "lynching" were because I was determined that I had to have MY way...I knew what I was doing, and wanted what I wanted...and I wanted it NOW! Only to discover, the hard way, that MY way is very seldom right, and when not in God's will, is NEVER the right way. He, now, is the love of my life. He'll NEVER let me down, or disappoint me! I appreciate this wonderful piece. Excellent work!
-
-
May the Lord use Himself to be your sole focus as you press on toward that heavenward call, forgetting such things behind you. I'm sure He's grieved that many of us have such baggage. He's undaunted to use it for good.
Amen!!!
-
-
Being a single person, who has been through this "lynching," I completely agree and connect with this poem. I have not been able to let anyone else get a chance at my heart after what happened to me. I think that you hit the nail on the head with this one. You have captured the essence of giving a heart away to someone who took it and crushed it leaving it unable to trust again. Let me respond more to you in a private message. I loved it. You did a great job with understanding how I feel about relationships after being lynched, great comparison.
-
-
Find Hope in This:
"Not that I have already attained, or am already perfected; but I press on, that I may lay hold of that for which Christ Jesus has also laid hold of me. Brethren, I do not count myself to have apprehended; but one thing I do, forgetting those things which are behind and reaching forward to those things which are ahead, I press toward the goal for the prize of the upward call of God in Christ Jesus." - Philippians 3:12-14
-
Adding your comment:
1 - 19 of 19
