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Take Me Now and Forever

The heart can become weary of so much weightlifting.

Time is subjective
and relative.

There is nothing more that I want right now
than for you to love me.

Take my breasts in your able hands;
take nourishment from them.

Take my legs that long
to take their place around your waist and neck.

Hold on tight to my ankles.
I want to stand on your shoulders,
be lifted up
by a lifetime lover.

Author notes

I want to lift you up.
I see you standing on my shoulders, my love,
like a statue erected in your honor.

With your soft cream thighs around my neck,
I'll brush my cheek on your soft hair,
and with all my mouth,
take you anywhere.

I want to attach myself to you,
like an animal.
I want nothing more than to stay inside you for days
with your legs around my waist,
subsisting only on your breasts,
the juices you exude.

Time is relative
and subjective.

I will hold on tight
to your weary heart,
and forever carry the weight.


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  • Michael Pastore
    November 13
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    This is wonderful

    Your poem(s) are so honest and plain and brilliant. I love the first line - 'The heart can become weary of so much weightlifting' - how much knowing is there in that line, how much bitter experience! I really like the contrast between the first (female) part, the 'offering' ... and the second (male) part - the 'giving'. As a package, they fit together so well - like lovers.


  • Edie gold member
    November 11
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    This is very beautiful and erotic at the same time. I love the contrast of base and primitive to soft and emotional vulnerability in your write...

    "and with all my mouth,
    take you anywhere.

    I want to attach myself to you,
    like an animal."

    in contrast to...

    "There is nothing more that I want right now
    than for you to love me.


    I will hold on tight
    to your weary heart,
    and forever carry the weight."


    well done Suzanne


  • sgking123 silver member
    November 8
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    erotic

    hell this was so hot. from warmth to vulnerable and desirous...this was an intense exprseeion of the entire journey right using the imagery that was so profond.. I loved it like hell .keep penning