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and still I continue to search for a strength


truth sauntered
with crushing urgency,
like morning's first fallacious brew

he settled into moments,
enjoyed a narcissistic view;

then spoke of reasons,
contesting drama
despondence decays

and with truth's emergence,
unrequitted proof
I learnt
it's time to bury this charade-

time to lessen the quill
to demand to be still

to surrender to susceptibilities rage;

time to imagine promise,
the delight of disappointment


to spotlight

another inadequate, insignificant display…


Author notes

prompt:

"Your's are not exclusive, we all contain defects. The tiny ones pass by without ever knowing the pain we cause. Larger ones...well those we need to work on, get over and figure out why we had them in the beginning. When we finally admit that we are not perfect and the world won't die if it does not revolve around us, we might have a chance. It's slim at best but isn't hopeless a defect too?"

and the word "Defect"

I know this rhymes, if this is a problem I am more then happy to remove it from the contest...

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  • LavendeRFlameS
    November 18
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    such wonderful wording, for such a short piece.


  • Nyafushia gold member
    November 11

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    Nicley penned... a heartfelt message. Something I think we can all relate to, I know I sure can!


  • Mango Memories gold member
    November 1
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    bravo! just as good as when i first read it.


  • annother gold member
    October 31

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    I love the way this write seems as if I can hear you thinking to yourself. A trip through the mind, which is something one wouldn't normally share so easily. Very creative and well penned. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.


    Ann


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    October 31

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    So well spoken...as always I contemplate deeply your words. Bless you my dear friend!



    Sue


  • Cannonsfire
    October 31
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    The internal rhyme doesn't bother me at all as the flow of the piece works quite nicely. Thank you for a strong entry C


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    October 31

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    perfection in words, per usual..... i read this several times. and with rhyme or without it delivers a powerful message.
    your work is amazing ....


  • Mango Memories gold member
    October 31
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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    October 31

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    Hmm ... there is something about this that has me pausing and taking a deep breath;

    I like that this has third and first pronouns within;
    as always your vocabulary is perfection & vast

    "it's time to bury this charade-

    time to lessen the quill
    to demand to be still

    to surrender to susceptibilities rage;" --> I want to frown slightly at those lines; for a talented quill should never be put down

    as always you're brilliant to me


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