Violins whispering across your smile
As the world slowly ebbs away
A quiet beauty in a pit of lies
Oh how the music drifts away
There's little left to be found
The people are dead
There's no more sound
Metal twisting towards the sky
A new being with a heart
A deadly friend of the night
Stand if you wish, there's no rush
The voices run with the clouds
Lost memories of those
Who simply forgot to let go
The world won't simply fade
The pain is an echo of disgust
Something we all deserve
The payment for being pathetic
Cold and grey amongst the mud
Your eyes a vibrant green
Desperation, discretion
Wishing to be saved
But not even the sweetest price
Will ever be your freedom
The whole world's gone away
They've left you here to rot
As the trees are taken with the wind
And the violins disintegrate
Your duty has been done
Your soul has been won
And it's time for you to accept your fate
You'll be full of sorrow
Your body will slowly rot
All you will be is a memory
Who forgot to let go
Author notes
http://sweet-lovely-death.deviantart.com/art/Sorrow-113862871
Voila! I was going to do hate but when I began writing I focused more on the idea of a world rotting beneath their feet. And so, it became sorrow.
A contest entry
- SpydurPoet's Family Contest #6 - Images by SpydurPoet.
1850 points, ended November 7, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Powerful write. You did a stunning job on the prompt. It was a deep and emotional poem.
Thanks for entering the contest & best of luck.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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Thank you
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Hey, it's been a while. I see that your writing has matured a lot, although it was good before, as well.
The thing that stands out to me here -- and it really caught me by surprise -- was the flow of your piece; the syllabance. With the exception of maybe a couple lines, the entire piece has a very inviting rythm. Smooth, feels quick.
Keep writing, it's good to see your stuff again.
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Why thank you.
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