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stone...

i miss you boy
so so much
i miss your hugs...
i mis your touch...

i miss the way
you looked at me...
if only you,
were able to see...

that i cared about you...
so much it hurt...
but now your burried,
in the dirt...

a tragic loss,
of human life...
you took the pills...
you used the knife...

and now i'm here,
all on my own...
and my best friends name,
is on that stone....


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suicide of a friend

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  • Suffer-in-silence
    1 day ago
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    aww
    this made me cry
    i dont think i could handle lossing my best friend shes like my sister
    great poem XD
    -Rose


  • sgking123
    November 6

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    wow

    i loved the inetnsity which made me smile.boy must be grinning ear to ear.I use some intensity in my poems too.check m latest three and test


  • X.brokenlover.X
    November 4

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    Wow i can relate so much to this poem my boyfriend and best friend in the entire world committed suicide last year and it was the hardest thing in the world to deal with.
    "a tragic loss,
    of human life...
    you took the pills...
    you used the knife..."
    I don't know about all the periods but i like the general flow and i really like the concept. Great write and good luck in the contest