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A Halloween Visit from an Alien Baby

 

 

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a page with a colorful background…  

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I really can’t explain it-

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I just wanted to see words float, no, hover, over the page 

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each word, creeping a little bit closer to you

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            line by line,  word by word,  letter by letter 

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my message nearer…

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  just a little bit nearer, a little bit closer

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   I did not expect to enter the Twilight Zone... 

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after all, these are just thoughts, right?

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              I mean, if this were Halloween

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   you would expect my closeness to be

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 a little eerie…

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        maybe even unhealthy

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as if I were

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    unnatural being

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   from

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            the question is...

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      where are my hands right now…?

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    and what are they doing?

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(or are they hands at all?)     

 

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  • LAPoe gold member
    November 1

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    Now that you've hypnotized us with your colors and expanding words, what does scary alien baby want from us, we will comply, we will comply...
    we will comply, we must comply...

    laurie


    • wbiro gold member
      November 1
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      you will have to take me on your meanderings someday...

  • suecat
    November 1

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    I've never read a poem like this before! Brilliant - and I don't just mean the background!!! As the print got bigger, so did my sstress levels, waiting for something to jump out and grab me. Good one!!!


  • oldschoolhero gold member
    November 1
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    funny.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 31

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    Intersting write here

    What a muse you have penned and I haventr ever seen one like it before . Good work here


  • Cannonsfire
    October 31

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    lol That is one scary baby but this is very well thought out C


  • Vampress Alayna silver member
    October 31

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    OMG!

    when i started reading this i was think um ok hmmm then when i got to the end i jumped and screamed and ran away from the computer!

    good work!
    scared the crap out of me!


    • wbiro gold member
      October 31
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      glad you got past the 'ok hmmm' part...
      Scary alien baby... yes...

  • Breakaway
    October 31

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    Confused, but I like it.

    The beginning confused me... But I like how the words get bigger and bigger. It gets your point across, but I don't like the background. Gives me a headache. Still, great idea. Love the picture. Good job!

    • wbiro gold member
      October 31
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      thanks- reminds me of the wide differences in computers and monitors that such a piece is viewed on... I could add a 'best viewed with' note... lol or 'WARNING- will cause vertigo with any monitor over 21 inches"


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    October 31

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    Very memsmerizing background! I love all of the colors and the way that they overlap each other.
    Great work putting this write together and I am glad that you featured it.
    Hope the little guy gets home safely very soon! lol
    Take care!




    Jeremy0826


  • Eric Marsh
    October 31

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    oh i clicked the wrong poem in the box....wow my eyes are aching....haha i don't kow where your hands are lol...i just hope you have put the seat up..nice one my mate...keep cool


  • black-phenoqu
    October 31

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    wow, that's cool!

    the picture is very creepy, but the background is mesmerizing, and how the words come down to you. not sure i like how the words get bigger, and bigger. it seems as if you are just trying to take up space. but still, very good write here. bookmarked.

    • wbiro gold member
      October 31
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      thanks- the font getting 'bigger and bigger' was supposed to represent 'closer and closer' (to you) (and if I could have, I would have had the words reach out and grab you! )


      • black-phenoqu
        October 31
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        got it

        if the words reached out and grabbed me, i would have screamed and told the mods to kick you off

  • Marcia gold member
    October 31

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    That was delightful and your baby pic.....well....I'm surprised you put it out here. How old were you then? By the way, your hands are softer than expected!!


    • wbiro gold member
      October 31
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      lol I was six solar cycles old then...


  • ConjurerCaptainTam
    October 31

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    Where are the hands, your backgrounds made me so dizzy i need to close my eyes...but i gotta know where the baby's hands are first or they might get me...ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh


    • wbiro gold member
      October 31
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      they aren't hands, really, they're these feathery tentacle things... seventy-five on each arm, actually...


  • Wandering Woman gold member
    October 31
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    Hilarious!

    I loved it!!!


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    October 31

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    Wayne we have known for Years you were an unnatural being that cant keep his hands to himself nice of your mum to send along a baby photo for the page MUUUUUHAAAAAA


  • TheLyricsArePoetry gold member
    October 31

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    in my pants????? hahahaha!
    fantastic stuff.... happy halloween my friend


    • wbiro gold member
      October 31
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      happy boo-fest to you, too... (I shall remove my feathery tentacles post-haste...)


  • Storminbrenda silver member
    October 31

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    LOL it made me laugh I love that scary baby photo lol hilarious and Im not the least bit scared loved it the way you placed the write out amazing job and thanks for the I suppose it's not supposed to be funny but me I just cant help myself either for me thought it's giggleitis

    • Storminbrenda silver member
      October 31
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      LOL only because I 've scared the pants of friends with that as a avatar that scary baby travels well bless her hehehe nope i just all the way through you'll do well trust me lol or dont and eat my childrings for brekkie my poor childrings


    • wbiro gold member
      October 31
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      weren't scared? Oh, I am doomed to failure...!


  • Gothikitten13
    October 31

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    LOL

    LOL man that was wicked haha MAN that so totally made my day LOL


    • wbiro gold member
      October 31
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      glad you liked... alien halloween baby indeed...


  • DeJaBlue gold member
    October 30

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    Haha....too cute...I mean funny...I mean scary.
    Well, you get it, right?
    Ugh...nice job.


    • wbiro gold member
      October 30
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      sorry- I was wrestling with AP's alien editor...



      thanks...!



      from my tentacles to yours...


  • still.she.waits
    October 30

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    *snickers*
    ..... again.
    lol.

    this is slightly tips the scale on creepy.
    hmmmmm. where ARE your hands right now....?


    • wbiro gold member
      October 30
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      hands?




      (do not move, tentacles, she thinks you are hands...)





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