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If I fall

When I get close to something beautiful,
Nothing's gonna harm you, not while I'm around
Cutting through the darkest night in my two headlights
I dance around this empty house
I'm drinking wine and thinking bliss is on the other side of this
Gaze into her killing jar, i'd sometimes stare for hours.
Jessie is friend. I know he's been a good friend of mine.
I conjure up the thought of being gone
I picked this flower. Right over there is where it grew.
I saw you across the dance floor
In the middle of a gun fight, in the center of a restaurant
Good morning dawn, good morning day
These are my friends, see how the glisten.
I have sailed the world, beheld it's wonders
Calm down. Deep breathes. Get yourself dressed.
Long lost words whisper slowly to me.

Author notes

If I fall- Matchbox Twenty
Not while I'm around- Sweeney Todd
Standing Still- Jewel
Funhouse- P!nk
Crystal Ball- P!nk
This Jetset Life is Gonna Kill You- My Chemical Romance
Jessie's Girl- Frickin' A
It's All Your Fault- P!nk
When Words Fail- Shrek the Musical
Meaningless Kiss- Hugh Grant
You Know What They Do To Guys Like Us In Prison- My Chemical Romance
Morning Person- Shrek the Musical
Friends- Sweeney Todd
No Place Like London- Sweeney Todd
Details in the Fabric- Jason Mraz
Haunted- Evanescence

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Comments


  • novacaine.
    2 days ago
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    aww, yay. Pink, Sweeney Todd, and Frickin' A. it made me happy.


  • just weak hands
    October 30

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    hmm in a way, I think it connects in a more abstract way. You punctuated very well ! It helped everything flow a lot better. Good job !


  • oldschoolhero gold member
    October 30
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    why is this better than 90% of the things i read on this site.
    luck > writers.
    =|