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the education of coincidence

you've shown me a new voice,

language folded over words

with ones i'd never heard

 

ones you had denied, often enough

to believe they were foreign,

your tongue unable to untwist

syntax

 

times i groped for

the measure of balance,

scales tipped

 

flavored with uneveness of fear

 

an invisible circle

drawn around yourself,

holding it all inside

 

the fight against a changing tide,

like your river i pushed harder,

directions of stubborn flow

from swirls of mud to

the clarity of recognition

 

was it so bad?

the ascent to that mountain,

rock slides here and there

with stones impenetrable

 

none more difficult

than my refusal to shift 

 

there is the slightest wind change

for the bird who could never land

 

his eyes begin to see,

things mistaken

how errors can be unbroken

 

how beautiful you appear to me

a chalice overflowed

 

pouring the spirit out

of someone who longs to be free

 

understands now

the worth of the journey

 

discovery that truth

is playfully new

 

a best friend

 

 


 

 

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  • ShaShay
    November 12

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    you've shown me a new voice,
    language folded over words
    with ones i'd never heard


    This was an interest grabber. Great start to a very intriguing write. Your word choices combined with your spacing made this an enjoyable read. Two thumbs up.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    October 31

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    how beautiful you appear to me
    a chalice overflowed


    I like this image.


  • poetryality silver member
    October 30

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    Firstly, I love the title. Secondly, the words flow effortlessly and remind me that life is such a precious occurrence.

    "his eyes begin to see,
    things mistaken
    how errors can be unbroken"


    Reminds me of my youngest son who was labeled a "troublemaker" and I knew better. He allowed that label to cause his rebellious nature to usurp his gentleness. He has now come into his manhood, and looks well after his son and fiancée.

    Great work Sis'! I wish you the best in the contest.


    Always ♥

    Renee


    • Cannonsfire
      October 30
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      sis...yes like you I know better too, it's when they see 'better' in themselves that makes it such a wonderful coincidence


  • JinSays gold member
    October 30

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    I think.



    yep.


    definitely

    Love always,
    jin

    • Cannonsfire
      October 30
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      yep I think definitely too psst (book title?)


      • JinSays gold member
        October 30
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        "four letter words besides love and hate..." or

        "Get in, sit down, shut up, and hold on to your ass baby, we're taking ONE HELL of a RIDE"

        you can have either, my compliments

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