Did you know…
you pull me in, draw me in- every time I encounter you,
I fall… heart-lost, into you…
Your eyes beckon, with a mind of their own-
hungry, thirsty, unsated;
saying things you would never dare to say;
revealing that which you would never openly reveal…
I see, I hear, I feel them speak, whisper, shout-
and I respond...
in ways I never dared to imagine,
in ways I can never hope to control…
I try to harden myself against you-
the harder I, the softer you;
it is a duel that is a hopeless struggle for me.
Just take me, now…
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No metaphor or symbolism in this. Not needed and not the least bit lacking in emotion. Very powerful writing indeed.
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romantics need nothing in between...
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oh take me now! [said dramatically]
*snickers*
I'm sorry. I'm in a mood today.
and you're the first I've come across to pick on.
but seriously...
very romantic. it tickles my "awwwwwww that's so sweet" notion.
back to random me, I wonder what responses I would get
from a poem where the only line was " take me now"
I think I'm gonna do it.
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but no, 'a snicker' so close to Halloween brings to mind the candy bar... maybe 'a giggle' ? I don't know, that's your department...
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hmmm... tickles, taking, a snicker, and serious... nice sequence of events...
well, your one-liner would need a title... hey, I think we just created one...
ah, I see you have one already... maybe we can work 'trembling' into this one... let's see... "tickles, taking, a snicker, serious, and trembling" how about that? ooo-la-la...
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