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My Rainbow is None...

 

 

i. 

I have seen the clouds fallin'
    ashes so white and so bruised.
  
                  I have seen the sun cryin'
                       rays so broken and askew.

ii.
Oh, the wind led my ship
    underwater...
    How, now, to reach a shore?
    My anchor is broken...

    I followed your words,
    and let me be yours
    but love became a habit
    almost breathe-like;


     And you shall break me
                                  and send me asunder

                                                                   ... soon


iii.
I have seen the rain piercin'
    skins so fragile and so worn.

                   I have seen the sea floodin'
                       hearts so longing to awake.

iv.
You have put my soul
    in indecisiveness;
    I'm scared... it's ruined,
    this little strength
    I've found in you...

    'Cause you disappear
    leaving silence in your rear;
    I'm for granted
                                   ...again


    Love's a lesson, I'll never learn...

    You...  

              them...

                          us...

                                 all...
    are mere smoke,
    fleeing to heaven
    and then...

                               my [our] rainbow is none...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

(C)Noor 10/30/2009 

Author notes

Contest prompt: some kind metaphorical or literal tie to the death of a rainbow.

I don't know if this is what you wanted but that's what came out of me...

 

 

Picture credit: Sad Rainbow by ~DON14

 

Thanks for reading! 

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  • AngelBellerose gold member
    November 10
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    this is stunning deep in though for i hear the love and last call.. for the winds of time sweep the face of life ..well said and so worthy of the God dear Sis always hugs Angel♥♥


  • karma-n-peace
    November 3

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    A metaphorical read indeed, love it!
    You created a work of art as well as deep piece of poetry.


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    October 31

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    Your metaphors always breath your poems to life

     

    although the prompt       

     

    love where you took it

     

     

    very 'lovely'

     

    God bless you Noor...


  • Sheli silver member
    October 31
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    tragically lyrical


  • Puppydog gold member
    October 30

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    BEAUTIFULLY EXPRESSED

    I have sat and watched a rainbow fade away Ever so slowly the colors so vivid became but a faint wisp floating in the air.'s Lovely in its brightness but also a certain beauty in its fading away into nothingness.


  • glenn shannon silver member
    October 30

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    sadly beautiful love the way you link it all to a broken relationship hope its just a poem and not that your sinking so have a love filled day/night glenn


  • Ken-Maverick
    October 30

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    You've captured the prompt rather well...shaweety
    All the best in th contest.

    Ken

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