Stagnant shoulders
in the shower,
and thighs to remind
of how your mistakes
still determine mine
I put it all down
to a genetic
predisposition,
just like you, I have
no sense of responsibility
there must be some
incorrect chromosomes
convoluted
or bent
like curvature of the spine
bowed against the wind,
screaming scoliosis,
I can convince myself
of catharsis
even now
six hours away
I imagine the excuses
singing
"fuck you
and all you've been through"
Author notes
"fuck you
and all you've been through" - Damien Rice, Rootless Tree.
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Oh, ahahaha. I like how enthusiastic Keira seems about this piece, and about you.
Beautiful writing, sir. I loved the third stanza.
Thank you for your entry.
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Haha, I think Keira's entusiasm is because we had been discussing how we like all the same music. Either that or she is just madly in love with me. Probably a combination of the two.
Thank you!
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wow.... this is realy good i can feel it every word you say i can feel
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amazing...no very amazing. the words everything...wooow check mine out x
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oh wow
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Thanks, I hope that's a good "wow"!
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This is brilliant.
But should "convuluted" be "convoluted"?
And you know Damien Rice? Nicki1, I LOVE YOU ETERNALLY AND ENDLESSLY AND UNCONDITIONALLY. <33333333333
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You're right, it should be. I'm afraid my spelling is not always infallible!
Of course I know Damien Rice! He's wonderful. I LOVE YOU IN EXACTLY THE SAME WAY. <3 <3 <3 <3 <3.
Thank you, dearest.
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