I lift my head up to breathe
But barely a breath taken
Hope just out of reach
Unable to be obtained
Dying, disappearing inside
sigh....In feelings of defeat
But there before me you stood
Reaching out your hand to me
Full of warmth and friendship
Offering hope and a part of you
Your love has lifted me up
Higher than I've ever been
When I look into your eyes
I see my future and find comfort
In you I find my breath
And breathe in your love
Which shall sustain me
For all of eternity
Author notes
Written April 13th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Make me believe in Love Again by SuZyCuE.
300 points, ended February 14, 2005, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Can you feel the love? I can! by MJ Forgives.
1070 points, ended October 10, 79 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Awwww so sweet. I like your poem and enjoy reading it. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for entering. Love and Peace!
-Jess
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Thank you for your beautifully penned entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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This was such a fantastuc poem! It was simply beautiful! You write such great romance poems Keep it up!
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Beautiful and romantic
Such a sweet, gentle love poem - simply beautiful, Lena. You do know how to write ROMANCE & LOVE in all its colours. Congratulations on winning the gold trophy - of course you deserved it, my friend!! I just loved this gentle breeze, this soft-hued breath
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Hugs
~ Nicolette
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Awww... Reminds me of my boyfriend...*tears* Great poeml... The background is really cool... and the poem is beautiful and full of your heart! Great job! And keep writing. Good luck in my contest. Laters.
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I LOVE IT!
Wow, this was amazing! You had me entranced in your words... I can not even pick a favorite i like it all to much!! Wow is all I can say! Great write... Your words just flow they dont feel pushed they feel natural jsut describing every emotion you can put into actual words! Great peice of work u have here...thank you for entering!
Ladybug15 -
WOW! I can feel the love! Great job! I love the flow and rhythm! "Your love has lifted me up
Higher than I've ever been" I love that! Thank you for entering!
LAdybug15
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Excellent
The beauty of Love is shown clearly in this lovely poem...Excellent
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You rock the party! That was dope! I soooo know going throught that myself. Great Write! Loved it!
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this is very good, I realy like you choise of words, it also flows very nicely, wow you have like a million alauds!!!! I never get that many!most I get is 3 on my poem 'All Alone' lol shows how much I suck! Merry Christmas to you and everyone around!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! you 8 DAYS TO GO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Poppyx
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this a truly amazing poem. ilike your chice of words.it expresses so much emotion. Keep writing from your heart it is wonderfull
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I really like this piece it really spoke to me... Thats sweet how you express the love and how you intake it...great job...ps check out my poems...ive only have 5 i just started...thanx for sharing.
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that was a great poem! I enjoyed it! Great Write!
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this is nicely written. it kinda started out slow for me but after the first few lines I was in to it. good job with the poem the emotion is well written!
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excellent!
Beautifully written!
So much love expressed in this that it fills the reader with a grand feeling!
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Awww... So sweet. It feels so great when you feel you've hit rock bottom to have someone there to pick you up and put your pieces back together. When you feel like you wanna give up, they push you to carry on. Do the right thing. Make you feel like you belong. Like you become .. a part of them or something. Love can be great. n.n
Nice write!
--ShatterdYouth -
Being in love is so nice. New love is the best. ~~Shannon~~
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awww so inspiring. Loved this!! Put me in a good mood, and the backround is awesome.
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That was so beautiful. Infact i can hardly breathe now. I could really picture your words and i could feel the change from unhappiness and loneliness to joy and hope. Very well written, well done.
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thats very beautiful. i think that you did an amazing job on it and the poem. i love the emotion in this and i think that you are a very good poet. love lonely
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. AWWWWWWWWWWWWW! This is so sweet!!! What a wonderful feeling to be in love. I totally loved the wording in this. It's amazing. GREAT job of expressing your the emotion and feeling of love in this poem! Thanks again for entering and good luck!
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awesome!
You took my BREATH away! I love it! Keep up the good work! -
well, well, well, what a lovely piece. that is bursting with gracious love...modest and beautiful love. i am glad that hope has been givenn to you through the sands of love and wish you luck in the future.
good luck,
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I don't think I am reading this how it was meant to be, at first I thought of a person, but then, it was more like you were talking about God. There are people who can give us that much support, and in them we see the works of God. Whatever it is a beautiful write, so true to love and God. very nice write.
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amazing how the love of another human being
(be it romantic, friendship, or love for a family member)
can have such a positive impact on our lives.
so nice to read of love in a positive format
wishing you both joy in your relationship,
~liz -
As a write, this is just incredible. The image you portray with him breathing life into your souls is probably the highest tribute one can give to another. It is not just love, it is more of the completion of life, finding your true 'home.' (so as not to say soul-mate)
As a poem, with respect, I believe it could do with some minor tweaking.
Overall, a very good write and very impressive number of applause. If I had any left, I would have given one to you but hey, I'm standing up now and clapping for you! lol...
Acclaim'dly,
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Nice poem. If it weren't for your author's comments, it could be about a love or about God (if you're a Christian). But that's the beauty of poetry- so much is in the eye of the beholder. John is one lucky man, and you are one lucky woman.
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Its good, I've read alot of love poems so its not the stand offish that I would look for. Love is just that Love and its hard to describe, but everyone has a different defanition on how it affects them, I don't see what all the hype is about this particular one. to me its not much different from all the other million of love poems posted here.
~Jacquie -
Awsome
Wow. This is so nice. the love you share with this "Person" is obviously special. *Jealously* U r so lucky....Keep up the great work!!!! -
Very well written, I love the style you portrayed. Great write.
~Dios~ -
Bravo! Your love is so special. I am so happy for you. Good Luck my sweet friend for you deserve it. This is written so well. ~~Shannon~~
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Nice write! you can really feel the warmth and compassion you write with! everything flows together awesome! keep up the great writing!
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aww thats really sweet. i like this alot. its so beautful...flows great. good job!
keep it up
always
lost -
hella good mi amore
An absolutely lovely and captivating write, dahling.
cheers
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you expressed yourself well in this piece. i do hope things work for you and your love john. Jacki d
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You pretty much echoed my poem, "Castle of Contentment," and I am so glad I found somebody who has found true love, the love that lasts through all the storms, that scales every mountain, and loves in such a way that there is never any doubt. You poem is so beautiful! And, I'm so happy for you two! Just beautiful! I'll be reading more of your work. Love this. Really struck a chord in my heart! Love, light and truth!--Kel
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awesome!
I started tearing up after I read that
Great job!!the words flow beautifuly!Maybe someday I'll be as good as you -
I'm going to be a smidge different from your other comments in being blunt. This peice, for me, was slightly difficult to follow. I love the message you pushed across and your words work well with the emotions, it's just it seemed rather rigid to read it together without pausing to re-read a few lines. I appreciate you sharing this poem with us all and keep writing! ^_^
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LOVE
On reading this poem of love I thought about the song "you raise me up" - you raise me up to all that I can be...!! A lovely poem that breathes love and dedication and hope and dreams come true! May you love forever! -
A very special poem for a very special person . . .I see you have a WOW amongst the comments - I wish they wouldn't do that LOL - what has the War On Want got to do with anything - Albert.
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Deep poem well expressed -
I love this poem...it's so my style, the form of poem I strive to write. The imagery, simplicity, and story line are all great. Keep it up!
:~D
ShadyRose -
Wow, this is a truly awesome poem. You use very beautiful words and express your feelings very well. Great Job! I applaud you...!
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Dying, disappearing inside
sigh....In feelings of defeat
But there before me you stood
Reaching out your hand to me
....awesome. It has a lot of feeling and wonder. Made me think about a lot of things about myself. I enjoyed reading this write, it was a great one!
Echo ^^ -
Beautiful
awesome write! wow, I felt that was about my exbf... (whos name was John, lol) So I can relate to this one really well... Thank you for sharing
~Zan -
Wonderful!
I really like this! It says so much and has so much feeling!
You have captured the mood and shown such passion in the way you wrote it. I commend you for a very well written and easy flowing poem. Thanks and keep writing! -
WOW! i just have to say it! It's amazing.I'd give you 3 thumbs up if I had a third! ya lol
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Many words will be rethought. Memories will be replaced.
But those we script down will forever be ours to be known by more than ourselves.
What better for us to always read than these words that slip from your heart...
Bravo and Applause
~Someone -
i love this poem. i can relate to it so well. i used to feel like this but then he was ripped away from me, so now i sit here, waiting, longing for someone to be there. i especially like this part:
In you I find my breath
And breathe in your love
Which shall sustain me
For all of eternity
GREAT WRITE!!!!! you get 2 thumbs up
~Betsy~ -
wow, this is really really exceptionally well written I love this and yes ur right it is only a glimpse of feelings between people in love but oh what a glimpse! very beautiful!
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This is a very sweet poem and i think everone has a someone out there that can help them.. This is a very good write and i just love the word/flow of it... Keep it up
Todd -
dudemon
hmmmmmm o.k if you say so
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hi,
sounds like u contented dudemon...
nice background...
nitey nite
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Hi there,
I feel that this was a great write, I really enjoyed it. Well done and all the best
blue moon
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lovely
I love a love poem, Purplesky, cause love rules. To read one is like being in love all over again. Thanks -
LENAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!
Don't worry about codec... he meant to say your poem rocks
Just seems to be a bit jealous or something... poor thing.
Anyhoo.. I enjoyed this write, shows that your passion is still there, and always will be for John. I loved the feelings I got from this write, that love that you and John put out is just awesome, heck.. it's amazing!! You two pull us all in with the warmth and love you feel for eachother. Just remember to let go of your grip on me, when the temperature get's to risin too high 
Love you guys!!!!!
~Aimee
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o.k first of all I would like to say I feel sorry for you cause love can be like that. Trust me I only write from heart. The funny thing is a couple of months ago I would have said the same thing but I amaze even myself as I am Just as In love as my poem states.
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this was deep and emotional and feeling like you are drowning is a horrible feeling and then when u find love... its good again
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Superfantabulastic
Wow.. great poem. I really enjoyed it. You've got a very interesting style. I really like "I find you in my breath and breathe in your love" Great and powerful words. Keep up the great writing.. I really love this one. -
Love this perfect velvety emotions I realy ennjoyed reading this. It brought out warm feelings of happiness and joy. Great job keep it up
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Duh, if you rely on another person to be the only reason you want to live then that is messed up. You need to fix yourself before you ever deserve someone like that. Love isnt like that. This poem sucks.
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this poem was good and has emotiom and really like that
later dayz
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I can relate to your words ...only, he filled my nights when they were empty, and helped me see the stars again..he didn't mind that I preferred the stars and moon to sun and clouds ..and ..all of a sudden I wasn't alone, so I can relate Beautifully expressed feelings ..keep breathing for as long as you can
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Oh Purple Sky......I am so thrilled for both of you. May you together
know GOD'S LOVE....through the love given to both of you. May you be abundantly blessed together and as a family
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This is really good. I like how you described your feelings. It is a very interesting poem. It's great that you found someone. Hold onto them, you don't know what you've got till it's gone.
~shari~ -
Beautiful!
Wonderfully written, and expressed lovely, thanks for sharing your heart, which I love to read, because you have one of the best! Thanks for sharing, and I'm so happy things are going good between the both of you... Pen on my forever friend!
Much love always!
-Timothy
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Love is a blessed thing! I met my fiancé online as well, isn't
it so good that we have internet?! I could feel your dispair
in the beginning of the poem and the light that came into
your life. Best of luck to you two!
Jen
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awsome poem...you deserve an applause!
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EXCELLENT JOB !!
AWW THIS WAS SO SWEET , I KNOW HOW YOU FEEL , THERES ALWAYS A LOVE THAT RESCUES US FROM EVERYTHING AND THERE ALWAYS SOMEONE THAT FOR NO REASON MAKES US FEEL SO IMPORTANT AND GOOD ABOUT ORSELVES WHEN WE LESS EXPECT IT ! CONGRATS YOU GOT MY APPLAUSE ! MARY
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Very good ending to the poem, gives it a close but also doesn't close it too much which is what makes a good ending
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He seems to have given you new hope and a different way to view your perception of life itself. I love hearing stories like these. It gives me inspiration and a more positive outlook. I wish you both the best.
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kudos!
maybe it's just that i'm in love, but i really enjoyed this one -
I really liked this.. Great emotion... very very very good write keep it up....
Todd -
wow-this is beautiful. short, simple, but sweet and to the point. soul mate? God? a special friend? there are many connections people can make with this-very well done and from the heart. great job-God bless!,
~kristi -
excellent
Nice write...I also took the poem by the title,while reading I felt uplifted..A breath of honesty about friendship as well as what seems to me a soul mate..Thanks for sharing and keep up the great work.(deserved applause.
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Oh wow! I love how the ending was so perfect! I'll be honest, the first and middle parts were very nice, but they didn't hit me as hard as the last lines.
In you I find my breath
And breathe in your love
Which shall sustain me
For all of eternity
I don't know, something about that that just makes my mind do something funny... Very nice job here! Keep it up!
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This is a really great composition that deserves a huge amount of respect, and Views.. I really would love to seee more of your works.. So how do you go about composing your poems??? Do you write whatever comes to your mind, or have to wait and compose the poem over a long periiod of time???
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Which shall sustain me
For all of eternity
I really can relate to this poem... also i loved the last two lines. it was a great way to sum up the poem. good job. your the coolest........ maybe -
Wow. you are so cool
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This is very cute. Exellent poem. Keep on keeping on.
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Wanderful!!
Wow. Very deep and emotional. I love it! Well..*cough* Oy..I'm sick..ugh..Good write!! *cough* Hope to read more soon!
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Nothing in the world like love. I feel pretty much the same way. My life wasn't particularly worth living...now it's wonderful. Amazing what a little love will do for you!
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like the tiny bubbles of a fine wine opened it sprays across the page delicately gracing us with the scent and heady emotion yet to be drunk in your passions shared...very nicely written and also like fine wine it only grows better with age, as it passes through time you the bottle and he the wine, becoming vintage mingled as one.....Artis
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This beautiful its hard to express.Saddie23
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A veru hopeful and faith filled poem. i lovethe use of breath in your words. the breath of Christ, the breath of life, and the breath of love. They all are powerful in the image of l;ife they represent. Thank you for bringing breath to your words and images.
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wow, this is so amazing...and so beautiful...it kind of drew me in because of the title, i was thinking of the song by faith hill, but i think this may be even better!!! thanks for sharing ...
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An outstretched hand makes a difference in life and love. Beautiful expression
~Kathy -
GOOd
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It's nice and well writen, good form and color scheme. You used your words to portray your emotions and thoughts perfectly and I couldn't ask for a better read.
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Lena - this says it all. Beautiful. You deserve every breathe of happiness. I for one am smiling for you both, Susan
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