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Denied Before All

Its all slipping away
everything that had been so perfect
it's only fading into the dark,

I thought things would always be so perfect
never did I dream it would all turn around
within the last days it has all turned around,

He was perfect the sweetest person I had ever met
nothing did he ever do wrong
he only tried to keep me happy
it was all he wanted,

But here and there things would happen
only he had an excuse and I had only over-reacted
or it was something that wasn't his fault,

This what's happened now
there is no excuse
and this is all his fault,

Not only did he crush me into
he basically denied me before all,

Wiggling his finger ask me to come to him
I wouldn't for he could have came to me
I would have but I had already did and stuborness is all I received,

So now I set here in thoughts
wondering what do I do,

I can't let go
I love him to dear,

Everyone has ups and downs
but only I didn't think this was possible,

Now I can only think alone
but soon I have to face him with no idea what to say,

Author notes

Ok my boyfriend sat down and then when I went to set with him his friends wouldn't move,nor mine. Then his one friend moved, but I couldn't sit there because there was spit in the floor. Since, my boyfriend wouldn't stand with me I went to the other side of the hall and sat down. Then, he asked me to go where he was, but I wouldn't because there was no where for me to be and he wouldn't stand with me so I coudln't be with him there. But, he wouldn't come to sit with me. Finally, after I sat by myself for 10 minutes he got up to come to me then kept standing there then when the bell ran he came to help me up. I wouldn't let him help me because not only would he sit with me he wouldn't talk to me. I'm pretty heartbroken because this isn't like my boyfriend he always flipped out if he thought I was the tiniest bit upset. Please help me. Tell me your opinion and don't be afraid to tell me what you really think it won't hurt my feelings.

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  • ParadoxVictory85
    November 5

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    The poem is really well written I could vision what you were wording, great work of art!