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Falling

im falling into insanity but u dont care
the world broke out with calamity but u dont care
u were my friend and my sister to never leave my side
but where was your shoulder for the tears that i cried
my wings are broken and you let me drown in hopeless misery as i lay upon the ground
but u know what i fell into insanity and you didnt care
i fell into insanity and you were there
i fell into insanity and you let me fall....

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  • Queen Mab gold member
    November 6, 2009

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    I think doing away with the chatspeak would make the poem much stronger. It's a great freewrite. I love the closing line. Nice work on this and I hope to see more of your stuff soon.

    ~Mab


  • Syko Path
    October 30, 2009
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    awe this is so sad!!!

    it flow really well

    great write!

  • babygirl to u
    October 30, 2009
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    omfg this is so good i love it so much nice work