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You Under the Bed

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I try to pretend you’re not even there

With your creepy eyes and scraggly hair

You watch for my feet to dangle over the bed

As across the floor I fear to tread

 

I wait for a moment, silent, listening

And I feel your eyes watching, glistening

I feel you stalking me, so silent, so still  

Awaiting the right moment to go for the kill

 

Alone I wait, in the night, so forlorn

The night still young, a long time ‘til morn

You weren’t there this morning when I awoke

But now you’re back with your sick little joke

 

Please leave me alone,  go back where you came

For you it must be another frightening game

I tremble in fear of what lies ahead

It’s all your fault, you under the bed

 

 

Dee Garner

©October 30, 2009

 

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The prompt reminded me of when I was a kid and my sister and i shared a big bed. We were afraid to hang our feet over the side of the bed for fear there was a monster there waiting to grab us. All the time knowing of course that there was no monster... but... well, just in case, ya know. I bet my sister, J aime coudre remembers that, too.

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  • leo2
    November 12
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    It's amazing how all those things that go "bump in the night" when we were kids can have such a large influence on us when we grow up. I'd say you have a winner here. Hopefully, Friday the 13th won't make any difference in the contest...lol.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 7

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    Such memories come back as I read your lines..and the closet was another hideout, for the monsters when a little girl...You make it all come alive with your suspense! Rhyme and flow excellence adds to this entertaining write!

  • Billbard silver member
    October 31

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    This is e very well worded andrhymed poem.Thank you for the pleasnt read.Best of luck to you in the contest.Keep the ink flowing fluently.


  • Yemassee gold member
    October 31

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    As a literal interpretation it's errie enough. Someone is under the bed waiting...but of course as a metaphor as that secret fear (s)he is afraid to face -- it's eerier still. And that's what good ghost stories do, they allow different levels of interpretation.

    I feel that way about Moxie. That when I sleep, someone enters the house and steals it.


  • poetryality silver member
    October 30

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    Okay, now see, I was just about to call it a night, and now you have me looking under the bed before I go to sleep. LOL When I was a kid, "it" was in the closet next to the bed. I dare not open that door at night because for sure it would come seeping out like a vapor. LOL

    Gosh! Am I ever glad that those childhood terrors are done. LOL I loved the feel of fright here. Perfect for this time of year. LOL My eldest son was born on Halloween and I used to make up stories like this for him and his friends when they came by for his parties. I wish you well in the contest.


    Always ♥

    Renee


  • J aime Coudre silver member
    October 30
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    Nice..should win a throphy for you...


  • morningstar1948 gold member
    October 30

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    Hey Sis I love this one

    Hey sis I like the way you wrote this one. Well the water is 110 yard away from the house. we had over ten inches of rain from the night before to this morning. The water went down two foot and now ir is up four feet more. normal flood stage is 172 feet. and now it is 179.3 feets deep now.
    Love you
    Me your other Sis


  • Jory Anderson
    October 30

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    WOW...This is friken great i loved it it gave me chills and it flowed so nicely and i loved the ryme..if i was judging the contest you would defenitly win...but i'm not so good luck

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