As I read through his fabrication
Then knowing some women may think he's blazon
Making himself sound so sincere
When he just wrote what we want to hear
Trying so hard to get some ass
Him thinking womens "NO" will pass
Spitting out words he does not mean
While falsely treating women as his cuisine
But what he and other men don't know
That they don't always run the show
Women now are starting to flip the script
When all they want is to get wet and dicked
So after the players game is done
Ready to settle down with only one
Men need to treat their women like a goddess
Let her know she's his worlds fineness
Now for the women I want to say
That when this other man comes your way
Hold him... love him and treat him right
Because he's a keeper for your wedding night
Author notes
I do not claim the picture used with this write as my own. Picture found on yahoo images.
A contest entry
- Every Girl's Dream Guy....... by darell.
500 points, ended November 12, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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OutStanding!
Wow! I really enjoyed this piece alot.
I can tell you're a woman of the world.
Wise and well read. One who doesn't take
any shit but has had her share of disappointments.
I feel you on everything you said. The only thing
that lingered in my head was the notion, that when
women start playing the same games as men and think
that somehow when they meet the right guy everything
will be rosy. You know what goes around comes around.
Its best to stand your ground and be the better person
then to play those same old tacky ass games and get lost
in the game. Not knowing what or whose real anymore,
even yourself because you crossed the point of no return.
Great piece. Thanks for your very thought provoking entry
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Yes, it seems to be be one very large playground out there for most men when the years are young, and some when the years are old. Not much sincerety at all, but there are some who break away from this mold and prove different. And some women seem to follow the same pattern. Alas comes the time when one needs to settle and along comes the one of your dreams...He/She is second to none. I really like this cause it speaks about what goes on day after day. Beautfiul rhyme and rhythm and the flow was great. Love and and i wish you the very best in the contest.
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DAMN..
This is excellent! a great message too..well done my friend..
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Now for the women I want to say
That when this other man comes your way
Hold him... love him and treat him right
Because he's a keeper for your wedding night
kind of gives me hope for the future ,lol but the poem as a whole wisdom, keep it flowing -
wow very awesome
excellent job on this write this is ever so true great job it has a nice flow also and to let your truest emotion about the game of love come out
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I love it and every word is so true...Great job girl
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captivating
i love how im seeing poets trying to tackle the rhyming aspect of a poem. so few people understand that by introducing rhymes the poem instantly takes out an appreciable amount of depth and has to be looked at closer. as an aspiring lyricist i can appreciate this a lot more than others. the syntax and diction might need a little revising to find those perfect words and meaning but otherwise good job !
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