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A Halloween Truth or Dare

(or How I Will Never Spend Another Night in a Cemetery)

 

A boy keeps his word, or I've so often heard,

And his name will spread hither and far;

I feel a bit less than cheery in this old cemetery,

Seeing many a cloud, but no star.

 

 

The wind waxed much quicker, much colder and shrill,
My watch said ten minutes past ten;
Eight hours to go, just eight hours to chill,
Rite of Passage I'll sure earn by then.


 

And the shadows were many, and matches weren't any,
And mausoleums are cold on your back;
And you're thinking of breakfast and try to be steadfast,

To make up for the courage you lack.

 

 

Far from mind was that dreaded, now embedded thought,

That I'd lose and would draw that short straw;

My composure's now crumbled and far overwrought,

"Was that really the moon I just saw?"

 

 

Half hour past midnight, just six more to go,

The leaves making nests around my shoes;

The lights in the valley from far down below,

Were flickering Tom B. Stone's Blues.

 

 

And the shadows were many, and matches weren't any,

And mausoleums are cold on your back;

And you're thinking of breakfast, and try to be steadfast,

To make up for the courage you lack.

 

 

Just then for an instant, a flame not far distant,

Pierced the dark like a star through these stones;

So I just sat there, with a dull, blanked stare,

Afraid? To my soul! To my bones!

 

 

It was then that I swore that I'd daybreak adore,

For I'd one day a grave of my own;

But this Hallowsday feeling just sets my heart reeling,

Signed,

Yours truly,

Thomas B. Stone.

 


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And the shadows were many, and matches weren't any,

And mausoleums are cold on your back;

And you're thinking of breakfast, and try to be steadfast,

To make up for the courage you lack.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Appears this young fellow was dared to stay over night in the local cemetery.
Make no bones about it, he did a good job!

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  • samster0101
    38 minutes ago
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    I'm one holiday too late, but this was fantastic. Like something out of a children's book. I like the refrain bit, with the breakfast/steadfast part. It is word play on the written AND spoken level. I'm really digging your work.


    • adios muchachos gold member
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      Thanks Sam

      Got this together just under the wire for Halloween. Hadn't written a poem in months. Happy you liked it prima facie!

      John


  • Sky Princess
    November 15
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    FANTASTIC!!!!

    WOW, this is fantastic!!! Beautiful job!!! I love it!!! The words are beautifully written, you can imagine everything!! Amazing write!!

    Liz

    • adios muchachos gold member
      November 16
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      Thanks a lot...

      ...for your nice note on my poem!
      I read your author's page and was tickled. I'm happy to see other people abiding by RULE65 of the POET'S MANUAL which states...

      "Don't take yourself so G-- Da---d serious."

      LOL
      Thanks again SP


  • MondayApples
    November 15
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    Amazing. illustrates ur ideas

    That's really good.
    Kind of long tho!

    • adios muchachos gold member
      November 15
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      Dear MA

      There's probably more refrains than most people care to read. I guess I inserted them like that to make the poem seem longer.
      I'll have to rectify that after this post.

      Glad you liked it prima facie though.

      Thanks a lot.

      John


  • Night Terrors
    November 9
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    Hi please make this fit the rules I will be back to judge the contest I hope to see this fit them by then.


  • CelticQueen
    November 5

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    "Afraid? To my soul! To my bones!" My favorite lines. This was a fun, rollicking piece. You commented earlier that the rhythm's got you crazy. I can see that. It's a little cattywompus in a couple of places, but goodness, Man! He's in a cemetery, shaking with fright!

    There is one change you should make - last line of stanza two "Right of passage" should be "Rite of passage" - a ritual or tradition.

    How wonderful, John, to see you writing again. celtic queen

    • adios muchachos gold member
      November 5
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      Hi

      Been a long time, hasn't it? How are you?
      Thanks for the head's up on that rite deal. Could have been there a hundred years and I never would have discovered it!
      Glad you liked my poem, been a while since I've written anything as well.
      Needed to be more edgy or spooky, but I didn't want to make a book out of it.
      Really nice to hear from you.
      Thanks again for your notes!

      John

  • Judith Chandler
    November 3

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    One of those great Hallowe'en stories that get told many times over.

    Thank you for entering my contest.


  • Andi. gold member
    October 31
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    love it

  • LoVe It.

    NiCe.


    • adios muchachos gold member
      October 31
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      Hey SBG

      Thanks for your note! I'm a Virgo too! glad you liked the poem1

      John-Nevada

  • LoVe It.

    NiCe.


  • poetryality silver member
    October 30

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    I can remember as a younger poet doing poetry at the tomb of the unknown soldier in a huge cemetary in town, around this time of year. As the sun was fading poets were getting the hell out of there. LOL

    I say good for this chap. What a dare. In your words, what a scare!

    Have fun on Halloween. It's my eldest son's birthday. Yup! I had a ghoul 35 years ago today. LOL

    Love You ♥

    Renee

    • adios muchachos gold member
      October 31
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      Hey Renee

      Happy Birthday to your son! He must have a lot of Halloween and Birthday memories
      to recall. I've got about 30 candy apples to give out, and when they're gone, so am I. Got nothing else after that.
      Thank you for taking a look at my poem! I'm still looking at it and keep on finding flaws in the meter etc.
      "Oh it's the poet's life for me!" LOL

      Take care and have a happy.

      All the love,
      John


  • csmmoms2
    October 30

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    A fine halloween fair for sure...a fun read lol! We need more from you. -c

    • adios muchachos gold member
      October 31
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      Thank you Chuck

      Been a while since I did anything and it feels like it. The rhythm of this this got me haywire!
      Thanks for your note on it, means a bunch.

      John

  • abu nuwas
    October 30

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    Hahahahahahaha!

    Penultimate verse has two 'for's; and is there a word missing after 'sure'?


    • adios muchachos gold member
      October 30
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      Thanks for the heads up and the read

      Glad you liked this. Been a while since the last time I wrote anything.

      John


  • wwfhrocks14
    October 30

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    And the shadows were many, and matches weren't any,
    And mausoleums are cold on your back;
    And you're thinking of breakfast and trying to be steadfast,

    To make up for the courage you lack.

    favorite lines. love it.

    • adios muchachos gold member
      October 30
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      Hey Roxy

      Thanks a lot for the note on this. Haven't written a poem in a long, long while.
      Guess I gave myself a challenge to get a Halloween poem up by tomorrow.

      Thanks again, Kat, made my day!

      John


  • condor gold member
    October 30

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    What more can I say but this is just one Excellent poem that read so well and captured my attention with the great little Halloween story you told. The rhyme was superb and helped to make the read feel solid and believable and you never skipped a beat anyway...it just flowed. I love the reat verse.....





    And the shadows were many, and matches weren't any,

    And mausoleums are cold on your back;

    And you're thinking of breakfast, and trying to be steadfast,

    To make up for the courage you lack.


    This I would have to say would have been my favourite verse although the whole thing was simply amazing. It could almost be a song which it would make a good one. I don't think you would catch me staying in a cemetary at night...sounds too spooky. I think it is spooky enough during the day..lol!!!!!!!! Quite a cute humorous piece that had me smiling cause I could really invisage this boy there terrified out of his skull waiting for some dark soul to come by and snatch him. The rights of passage certainly sometimes take on some very strange ideas, never the less quite amazing. Sound flow and rhythm and like I said before, just beautiful rhyme. This piece my friend was definately worth waiting for and I hope you are going to srart writing a few more because this here is sheer talent. Once again I congratulate you on a fantastic write and please pen more.


    • adios muchachos gold member
      October 30

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      Hi Condor

      Thanks a lot! Was pretty troublesome since I hadn't done anything in a long while.
      All's well that ends well, I guess!
      Glad to get your note, means a great deal.

      John


      • condor gold member
        October 30
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        It was fantastic! Just goes to show that you haven't lost the knack and it is pure talent.


  • LdyBrknWing gold member
    October 30

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    Woot Woot

    A standing ovation for this great "story hidden in a poem." This was cute, John. This guy had a LOT more nerve than I would have. Gotta give him props for that! The rhyme here was great, and it had a great rhythm; made it easy to read. And you had so many clever lines. "...The leaves making nests round my shoes..." and "...the shadows were many, and matches weren't any, And mausoleums are cold on your back..." Besides the great humor, I think the thing I liked about this so much was that you painted pictures with your words; I could see this little guy, sitting with his back to the cold stone of the mausoleum, and feel how cold he was; shaking with not only the cold, but the fright. What a GREAT poem, John! Kudos!

    • adios muchachos gold member
      October 30
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      < Thanks Paula

      Thanks for your note on my Halloween poem. I really rushed this trying to get in under the wire by tomorrow. Glad you liked it prima facie!

      Again, glad to see you again!

      John

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