perceptions
are altered
focus is difficult
shapes shift
into high
gear ratios
reality
and illusion
play tag
with
expectations
blurred images
of past lovers
collage
of missed
chances
pressed flat
like a dried
flower
arrangement
interactions
spun
out of control
(out of here)
around
like a record
breaking
vinyl
shatters
glass ceilings
record
frustrated
ejaculations
A contest entry
- Hyde Parks Speaking Corner by Emmyb.
750 points, ended November 23, 18 entries
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Thought Provoking
Darling I like to think amid all the fluidity there is lesson gleaned with no regrets to an otherwise perpetual life. Some yes, ups and downs but the brighter side of anything has to hold a formidable expectation of grand prospects; as we live we learn yet what we adhere to as a result of that lesson is really only up to us…so smile, smile, smile.
I love that poetry can be speak bold to one and yet another find something in a way of subtle or very different I love the abstract in poetic thought that breeds an inherent goodness…I love your piece darling stunning write my heartfelt thank you for gifting me a moment of thought provoking delight.
Lady E
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"reality and illusion play tag with expectations" Very philosophical! And so true! I love the way you've expressed it.
"collage of missed chances" What a concept. This will keep me thinking!
This is great!!
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'collage of missed chances'....I really like that part of the poem. As we get older we realize the twists and turns of life take us to a place we never really started out for. One day you just look around and wonder how you ended up 'here'.
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'reality
and illusion
play tag
with
expectations'
This reminds me of tag-team wrestling!
Absolutely love this!
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Powerful Imagery!!
This poem reminds me of a quote I just read today: "The Hollow Men: Between the idea / And the reality / Between the motion / And the act / Falls the Shadow." -T.S. Eliot, poet (1888-1965) . Best wishes always, and take care...
Peace,
Cyn
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I like the way this is broken down into 4 distinct sections perceptions, expectations, interactions and the perfect ending, and so it all repeats until the end of time. Great poem, greater poet.
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Once reality steps in, things are hardly ever as we preceived them to be...then poof! disappointment...
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Great cresendo in that last stanza--good words and pace in it too. As we age it just spins faster and faster, until....
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sometimes in life that is all we see ejaculations of what life could be stutter on the face of really banged on the solitary rhyme no reason things.. on thing for sure is you rock my heart dear freind hugs always Angel♥♥
deep in pen so well said
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The presssed flat missed chances
has settled in my mind, visually--
as varied interpretations play upon
my imagination. Ah, word artist
yau are, John!
M-C -
John
When I was an altar boy, ejaculations were very short, but hopefully meaningful, little prayers said quickly. Could be two or three words. Like an exorcist sitting on the chest of a possessed person trying to make him/her cry "uncle".
Something like, "Good poem" or "great job!"LOL
One thing you will have bragging rights for will be, "I did it my way!"
Liked this a lot!
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Powerful frustration sensed here - I'm hearing the click click click of a record with a crack, spinning around for ever.
I really liked 'reality
and illusion
play tag
with
expectations'
for the image it gave me, shadows chasing shadows on a treadmill...
Best of luck in the contest, poet - is that glass ceiling a mirror?
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