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I Wish They'd Understand How I Feel

        Wife                                    Husband                          Mistress

         

          I wish they'd understand how I feel and that I am hurting.




I wish he'd love me.               
Need me, stay with me.
                                        I wish they'd understand.         
                                        I am stuck in the middle. 
                                                                                  I wish she's let him go.
                                                                                  Let us live. Let us be.


       

My heart breaks every day.My heart breaks every day.My heart breaks every day.

                                                                               


I wonder what she has.         
Is there something I lack?
                                        I wonder why they love me.           
                                        If I choose will I lose both?
                                                                                  I wonder y I bother.     
                                                                                  Do I deserve his love?




I make mistakes.                  I make mistakes.                I make mistakes.




Does she realize that
I loved him first?
                                        Do they realize that
                                        I love them both?
                                                                                  Does he realize that
                                                                                  I truly love him?



I just want to be loved.      I just want to be loved.      I just want to be loved.




What about the kids?
What about my life?
I love him and I need
him, but                                       
                                    How can I choose between 
                                    love and affection?
                                    Desire and trust?
                                    I want this to end, but
                                                                            Why do I allow myself
                                                                            to suffer knowing I'll
                                                                            never have what I want?
                                                                            I want him for myself but,




Should I even try?              Should I even try?            Should I even try?





I cry, I love, I need.          I cry, I love, I need.          I cry, I love, I need.


I hurt,I dream, I hope.      I hurt, I dream, I hope.      I hurt, I dream, I hope.


I wish I didn't take            I wish I didn't take              I wish I didn't take
love for granted.              love for granted.                love for granted.
                                         



                I wish they'd understand how I feel and that I am hurting.






Author notes

Okay, I know it is not perfect in alignment. It was very diffucult to get it where it is at now, since I can not do rich text and the poem does not appear the same on the edit page as it does on the completion page. I had to do each line indiviudally and guess how many spaces to push here or there. If this was microsoft work I could just set up an alignment for each, but since I can't this was the best I could do.
I wanted to show that in a love triangle all parties are hurt, and broken by their and the others' actions. I apologize that the word why is spelled 'y' in one line, but for some reason if I spell it correctly and extra space is added between the lines.

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  • AbundantBetrayals
    November 5

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    I love the ideas and though I know the alignment is important for you in this poem it does make it a bit hard to read. However I love the repition is makes each line even more powerful and I love how the repition is three...makes the love triangle even more prominent like each person is saying the line. Wonderful job! Thanks for entering and good luck!
    ~Betrayals


  • SomethingDelicate gold member
    November 4

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    You have hit the nail right on the head here. A lot of people like to think that the cheater and the person they are cheating with are pure evil and bad and wrong but you are right, everyone in a love triangle hurts and everyone has the right to be hurt. We are only human.


  • VampireKitty-
    November 4

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    WOW...good job it is fairly difficult to make poems like this well it looks i ahve never tried..it was a very good write that kept my eyes glued to the screen until the end...the best part was:I wish I didn't take I wish I didn't take I wish I didn't take
    love for granted. love for granted. love for granted.
    That was written very well and stood out alot for me good job..and keep up the good work


  • Dark-Ecanus27
    November 4

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    its diffucult to make poems like this one work, but i think you did a good job with it. everyone takes love for granted, its something we cant avvoid but we will eventually learn from it. the question is have you learned from it yet? for others to understand how you fell and understand your pain, you have to first understand others pain and feelings. so you use your pain and experience to help others, and through helping others you gain a solution to your own problems. thank you for sharing this.


  • rollingzen
    November 4

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    I wish they'd understand how I feel and that I am hurting.


  • MichaelLeeSmyth
    November 1

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    Pish-posh on the alignment thing.
    I won't make a claim as to my part in the drama, but, yeah, this was it.
    I like the set up, I nominally never like this style, this is excellent. I hope that you did not go through this, but if you did, thanks for sharing.
    Peace


  • HereComesTheSun
    October 31

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    LOVE THIS PIECE.
    all i am going to say

    thanks for entering.


  • Janetheplain
    October 30

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    Very interesting. By repeating the lines I felt the emotion that much more. Great write.

    Best lines:
    "Do I deserve his love?
    I make mistakes.
    I make mistakes.
    I make mistakes."


  • The-punk-princess
    October 30

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    intoresting.
    I like it!
    I myself have been in a love triangle.. there not fun
    This was a very intoresting and wonderful write.
    Thank you for sharing!


  • meic
    October 30

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    You have given each actor in this trio an authentic voice, aided I must say by the structure [though I'm not usually a fan of such things]. A poem I read more than once -which is not usual.

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