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If Wishes Were Fishes, The World Would Be An Ocean

You remind me of the ocean...

You're beautiful, you're deep.
I could never tire of you;
you waver, yet I know
you will always be there.

You deserve respect and
are not to be underestimated.

I can feel you all around me.
I know you would carry me
through the darkest nights,
but, you're so perfect,
it's overwhelming and I'm drowning.

I will always be there,
especially when you're blue.

Like water, I'd die without you
and I would just be nothing...

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  • KrazyKazi
    October 30

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    hey hey, glad to catch some poetic stuffs from you, sir. and this is very very good. very descriptive, yet simple and pretty. i'm lacking in better words, even though i've been awake for a bit and downed 2 cups of coffee Oo ANYWAY! this is gorgeous XD