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Mad Woman in the Attic

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No, it’s too quiet for this much noise
and I’m tired of listening to that click clack
of false teeth in the attic

I want to scream and kick open the door
just to prove once and for all
that there’s something alive in there
making a racket only I can hear

Jesus, what a strange place I live
in this house of whispering winds
where a knock on the wall is some strange code
leading to a treasure map
of rats’ nests

 

 

 

 

 

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  • mspider50
    November 10

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    wow I like this one.
    Makes me think that something is going on in that head.
    Well done

  • Topnotchsy
    November 5

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    Powerful piece. The attic is a metaphor that is quickly connected to a person's head, and in this way it allowed for an easy entrance to understanding the poem. I did not pick up on why the noise as coming from "false teeth." Was the idea to include the word "false" which may be how some view a person in such a state?


  • righteousme
    October 31

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    thank you so much for your time and talent in my contest ... the entry was much appreciated ... and i am one that knows the racket is only in my head ... lol ...