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Come to Me

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Mariners have feared the sirens' calls since time began,

warning how Ulysses fought to survive

against the deadly bewitchment of soft, wet hands

and sweet, throaty voices singing, "Come to me...". 

 

 

The elders warn the young when first they board

that these seductive airs will drown the thoughts and

fill the baser senses of a man until no prayer

or purpose can stem the tempting plea, "Come to me...". 

 

 

The sea has taken many men who could not forbear

the mournful, desperate cries for passion's release.

Having fended off their would-be saviors, they

steer into the storm and drown for answering, "Come to me...".

 

 

The creature's beseeching as sincere as any woman's heart,

an ancient loneliness drives her cruel lust to lure.

She does not see the hungry maw that opens for her love

amid the craggy rock. Death takes him while yet she sings, “Come to me...”.

 

 

Be warned the cursed, winged beast with voice so warm,

her desolation closes around the sailor’s soul.

Hold fast to your task with your bounty and mates,

sail past this fate until you cannot hear its “Come to me...”

 

 

          Come to me, come to me, my beloved,

          I have waited here for you forever.

          I am so cold and need your strong embrace.

          Only you can quench my longing.  Come to me...

 

Author notes

The human, emotional aspect of the mythological siren is not often discussed. Traditionally, we look at the danger they present, such as is described in the tale of Ulysses. But there is the story of Parthenope, one of the sirens who attempted to lure the great sailor. According to the tale, this creature threw herself into the sea and drowned because her love for Ulysses was so great that she could not bear to live without him. Thus, there is mythological evidence to suggest that the sirens meant no harm. They just wanted to be loved. A shame that they were such poison.

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 11

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    Enlightening write that has us spellbound with the "Come to me" voice echoing through each stanza..Truly the sea can be overpowering with her moods and vastness...and the old legends come alive in this write...Bravo!


  • tomisb
    October 31

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    Oh, there is the sea and some men are wedded to mast and keel or spar and star, it matters little and it matters not for when they come home, you can see it soon enough, the lingering at the door to catch a whisper of the sea upon the shore. The pause before a conversational reply as they wait for the whisper of a wave. They waste away, become irritable and depressed until they are sailing again the mountainous waves.

    You cast your spell, weave the song magic tells, and leave the reader with a sense of trance, where oceans call and seahorse dance.
    Love,
    Tom B.


    • Camille Morin gold member
      October 31
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      You write the most wonderful replies, Tom. This one is like music. Thank you!

      Love,
      Camille


  • Starswhispers silver member
    October 31

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    A beautiful piece you have added wonderful lines to the sirens songs, it is strong and sophisticated well done.


    • Camille Morin gold member
      October 31
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      Thank you, my friend. I wanted to show include in the tale a more human perspective of the sirens. What if they call because they are lonely rather than calling simply to lure sailors to their deaths? I'm glad you like it.

      Love,
      Camille


  • deercatcher
    October 31

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    I wonder if Ullyses untied from the mast regretted forgoing the beeswax...
    I reckon that was a song that got stuck in his head. Wonderif that is why it took him 40 years to remember the way home?

    You can't unring a bell...
    Seems to fit the aura of the holiday.


  • katie marie silver member
    October 30

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    A wonderful write on the siren's call. An excellent performance piece.


  • annother gold member
    October 30

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    Hauntingly beautiful piece you have penned. I really enjoyed the repetition at the end of each stanza, it seemed as if to flow dream-like. I found the ending brilliant, chilling words so soft and sweet that lead many to a watery grave.


    Ann


    • Camille Morin gold member
      October 30
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      Thank you, Ann,

      I'm very flattered to have such a wonderful comment from a writer of your caliber! I have a certain vocal "effect" in mind that I want to use in performing this piece. On "paper", I can only suggest that with italics. Your feedback indicates that the poem reads as I intended, which makes me happy.

      Merci,
      Camille


  • Rick Weston silver member
    October 30

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    awe you have captured well a fresh telling of this ancient wisdom - well done.

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