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Beauty With A Beast Inside!

There is a beast inside of me.
She wishes to just break free.
She wants nothing more to feel the wind in her hair.
She wants to feel the earth threw her paws as she runs to somewhere far off.

She want the sun to warm her.

The rain to give her water when she is thirsty.

The moon and stars to light her way at night.

She hardly sleeps this beast inside of me.

When she is angry she wishes nothing more to rip to tiny shreds those who hurt her.
She would enjoy her teeth riping their meat from the bones.
Using the bones as chew toys she would hide the remains when the time came and she was bored.
Or maybe she would be a drifter never getting close enough to any one to get hurt.
She would take her own pain and lock it deep inside.
She would hide behind her smile.
They must never know that they could hurt her so.
Her heart aches in silent pain.
She wishes some brave hunter would get close enough to cut out her heart.
Eventually she will become just like the rest of her kind.
Cold,heartless killers tearing threw any one like a shoe just the thought of it made he blue.
Why did she care she wondered no one ever seem to care for her.
When she needed understanding they showed despise and hate.
When she needed a shoulder to cry on no one was to be found.
When she put her trust and faith in people all they did was let her down.
When they did she wondered why kick someone who is already on the ground.
Tear stained pillows, bloodshot eyes the beast with in refuses to cry.
There is a beast deep with in me begging to be just free.
Free from pain and lies until the day she must die.

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  • tidoubleguher
    November 20
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    Very intense; great show holding nothing back.


  • im just human
    November 15
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    very nice , great job
    well done


  • lovlilmystery
    November 7

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    I can feel all the raw emotions, in every part of this piece. Beautiful write and well thought out. Good luck in the contest. Take care and have a great day.

    Sandi


  • MoreTears2Fall
    November 4

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    This is a great poem. It has great imagery it is very heartfelt and emotional too. It's something that lot's of people can easily relate to, and understand. It was a great poem.

  • bballer21
    November 1
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    i really like this poem. it creates good imagery. it's also really sad but completely relatable. fantastic write.


  • hershey101
    October 30

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    I like this poem its very cool and i can feel the hurt an emotions I can see this poem can relates to other people very well written.. Gudd Job!!!


  • Inakanu
    October 30

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    This is so good i love the feel and emotion in this and how it relates to all of us


  • NyteShade
    October 30

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    There is a beast in all of us wanting to be set free and at times it comes out of us all. If I was being hunted I'd rather become the hunter instead of the hunted. Great write you have here Piccola.

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