I could uncover a chain
from a day of hard rain to a day of gentle sun.
I could sit at Grandmother's feet and hear
the beating of distant hearts.
She left a shadow on my palm.
There was a light,
a wisp of understanding;
lifted above the flames of day
that lingered long
drowned the subtle night
brought it naked to my window.
A child of worry become
a father of pride, the view
over horizon is never clear until
clouds behind us shed their tears
to quench fertile ground.
I could unearth bones that loved the sun
touch ashen-faced moon of yesterday's memories;
I would love the light then as now.
I could uncover a chain
from a night of laughter, sweetness of passions,
a day of gentle voices and child's wishes;
... a shadow on my palm.
Words like raindrops, fall upon simple seeds
rise to cloud, and cover seas,
without forgetting.
A contest entry
- Ash and Bone by CarolDesjarlais.
1150 points, ended October 31, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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There are certain poems that make me feel like I'm on a roller-coaster. This is one. Each turn brings a new jolt to the senses. Poem like this remind me of when and why I fell in love with poetry--the analogies are spectacular. And the images... From the repeated title line to the spacing, I think this is a perfect poem.
-K
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Such tender penning you have here my friend.
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How great a poem. This was my favorite part -
"I could unearth bones that loved the sun
touch ashen-faced moon of yesterday's memories;
I would love the light then as now."
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Thank you Carol~
for your wonderful inspiration here, you did so much in your poem, expression, evocative ideas, reaching deep to touch the spirit, I am not at all surprised that the writers here have given so much in return...thank you for the honor...PK
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Such a gentle poem you have here. Yes it's beautiful
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Thank you Mari~
Yes, I think this one whispers...Thank you for all...h
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BEAUTIFUL
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Poignant, lovely and ever so well done, Poet Man. Good luck in Carol's contest. 
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