girl: if your going to break up with me go ahead and do it. (secretly i was praying he wouldent)
guy:its over
girl: okay,why?( trying to stay calm but close to tears)
guy: you all ways avoided me.
girl: no i dident!!!!
guy:lie
girl:either u were with your friends and i dont like half of them
guy:why dont u like my friends?
girl:it complicated(im scared to be rejected)
guy:that and you talk to me for like 10 sec at a time
girl:im sorry(meaning it)
guy:i dont care)
girl:what ever(im crying my eyes out)
what do u think?
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that's really different. i like it in the sense that i dont think that i've ever seen something written in the format that this one is written in. you need to check some of your spelling and you also need to take out the text talk. i know it's hard, but it kind of takes away from your poem.
otherwise, very interesting write.
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