tenacious autumn
cling to the end of bare limbs
forest shed her coat
chevrons of duck and geese crowd
crisp skies with noise and traffic
tall marsh reeds turn beige
scraping brittle-edged shoulders
mobbing water shores
crane and plover wade no more
where ice panes grow in shallows
wintry gales bluster
charge empty landscape screaming
ice sabers rattle
winter bays long lonesome songs
moaning with frost-laden words
a deserted stage
lay bare and summer's litter
scamper with each breeze
the warm days' play is over
the audience falls asleep
Author notes
This is a TANKA; a basic haiku of 17 syllables, with two additional lines of 7 syllables; totaling to 31 syllables. As with HAIKU, the subject-matter is nature and only nature.
For purists, there should be no title, no punctuation, no human involvement, and equally divided into three parts: What, Action, Resolution. In Tanka poetry, the two additional lines should introduce the next haiku (this example does not).
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I don't understand it's working -
This tanka or Haiku , but I sure like it in the long run. You don't have to know how but to like is is all that counts. I know I can, because can't get a grip on how to do it...mac -
so many lovely images...
a great poem.
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Brilliant Penning...
My hat is off to you, Poet!! 
Respectfully yours, Cyn 
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The work you speak of is way over my head. Something I never learned. I do enjoy reading it as it is a pleasure to
Read anyone work . You seem to do it so easy and well...mac
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Imagery complete ...
as I read each observation that you shared in Tanka form. You have shared some great scenes that revive my photograhic memory and you have done so with class. I loved the: "winter bays long lonesome songs - moaning with frost-laden words." To a Floridian your poem reminds me why I live where I do ... and yes, winter will whisper down the river here as well, but she'll do so unobtrusively and perhaps not stay as long. jy
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This poem
so well describes autumn with brilliant imagery. I particularly like the 2nd and 7th verses...so well written that I could feel the chill of the oncoming winter, sitting here on a relatively warm autumn day, as I read it.
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the title is my favorite part
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this is very nice
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