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Vietnamese G-String -

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    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • neurosine gold member
    October 31
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    Opie Hate


  • Barry Hodges
    October 30

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    I am pleased to read you plan to revise this. That is my own constructive criticism on the matter. I have never sniffed a Vietnamese G-String. Are they tasty?


    • horus8 gold member
      October 30
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      It certainly isn't my fault that while I was jacking smack at the big city marshmallow quarries (no doubt, living the life of a real hustlin' street poete) you were fisting Lord Saccington at the all boys informatory in between cricket and failed artists and their narcissistic scribblings class.


  • Naughtygrlred
    October 29
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    now that is more like it

    why did u cahnge it?