Mistress is in the mood for some play time,
with Her favorite man handling toy.
She will bring him to the point with each chime.
Which in Her dungeon, is the lucky boy.
Standing in high heel boots with toy in hand,
others gather upon this starless night.
Only a smile does She grace the poor man,
as he is tied down on his knees so tight.
Just the sound of the air being parted,
when the strips of leather land on his ass.
Each time they land, it honestly must smart,
but he knows that later the pain will pass.
When the Mistress places ice on his pain,
that sensation will drive him pass insane.
Author notes
Riftkin................7
your numbers pertains to a toy
7. leather whip
Now for your twist.....
You will also be writing this in the form of a SONNET
English Sonnet ten syllables per line
with a rhyming scheme of
#1) abab cdcd efef gg
Okay sonnets are not my thing, but for this challenge,
I gave it my best shot. Hope you like it.
A contest entry
- Season 10 (round 4) by Master Ktulu.
400 points, ended November 18, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
My poem, do not like it, back space.
Comments
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Whew! This is well done.
spelling/grammar/puntuation- 16
I felt that the 1st and 3rd lines of the 3rd stanza really did not rhyme well and really seemed forced.
Also, I believe that later in the write, in the very last line the word "pass" should be past.
presentation and creativity- 20
how well you handled the challenge=20
grab me=20
I loved the story behind this though...very well done
overall=18
To be honest, I am not all that great with writing any kind of form. I think that you gave an honest effort though, and this did come out well, with only a few minor mistakes.
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Total- 94
**Master Ktulu** -
nicely done
we are being so challenged to write beyond our comfort zone (mind you, not the pain, but the comfort of our own poetry) to expand our horizons and attempt to write something different...and you have done well with this sonnet! good luck in this round!
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I have to give you kudos just for being brave enough to be the very first up with the sonnets...
"Just the sound of the air being parted,
when the strips of leather land on his ass."
this simply puts me in the mood to spank someone......
best of luck to you in the contest!
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RIFTKIN
Damn is this another BUTTPLUG date you're starting to scare me. When I said no bedroom rules I meant for me not for you. DAMN! I hope you don't tell anyone about these encounters, how will I ever explain them. And furthermore I hope my MOM isn't reading your poetry again. I don't want her to think I would....
All my love your loving, but (not that one) nervous husband lover and best friend. All my love and luck to you... and me. Rick
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