his dad
went a'walking
when he realized he can't
love someone who can't
stop falling through
hollow walls
and
who won't ever
remember who he
was the day before
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carbon monoxide dreams
realigned his bones
throughout his body
the radio was left on
a station of
jazz
his feet laid motionless
and eyes were set on the
landscape of brick out
his window
the garage door
was closed
to the world
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he came and went
in my memories
slowly colouring
himself out
of my life
until I couldn't
even remember
what shade of
green his eyes were
at school,
the teachers
took his name off
the attendance list because
they forgot how to
pronounce it without
crying
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mama poured another
glass of wine and told
me that his dad is
prepared in ways
he wishes he would've
been prepared
in years ago
Author notes
crap.
A contest entry
- heaven just can't have you. by winterbound..
400 points, ended November 27, 6 entries
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the garage door
was closed
to the world
this whole poem is amazing. i had tears in my eyes : (
beautifully penned. this reminded me of a novel I once read. I will have to read more by you. i think there is something intriguing about your style of writing that i adore : ) good luck in the contest!
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this is just brilliant. I don't know why, but I just adore it.
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so so sad.
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the title pulled me in. the poem itself, i enjoyed it.
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the title is super stunning
as is this
when he realized he can't
love someone who can't
stop falling through
hollow walls
and
who won't ever
remember who he
was the day before
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carbon monoxide dreams
realigned his bones
wow beautiful
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i love the first stanza especially. and the last is perfect.
you are so talented!
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thanks.
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your welcome.
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