In the dark, she waits.
Straight lines have contorted
her once beautiful face.
He lies, he cheats!
Pure rage she does taste.
In the dark, she waits...
and she waits.
In the late hour,
her husband arrives.
Shoving off his coat,
putting his briefcase aside.
Unaware of his wife's presence,
he quickly strides.
Into the sharp end of a knife,
his body collides.
As he grasps
finding empty air,
she watches as he falls to the floor.
He won't be cheating on her anymore!
His eyes search her face,
scared and unsure.
His life slowly fades,
his expression
demure.
Breathing heavy, she looks down
at her husband's lifeless body.
She noticed something next to him,
folded and bloody.
It was a photo of a man
crossing the street.
A red X crossed over him,
stating 'mission complete'
Her hands began to shake,
her head filled with strife.
"I thought you didn't love me! Now I've taken your life!"
Unbelievable despair overcomes,
as she drops the knife.
What of such irony,
to be an assassin's wife.
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A work of word mastery! Loved it!
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Beautiful
I know it is odd to call such a work beautiful, but that is what the writing was. It was smart and witty; the irony was well set up and expertly executed [no pun intended
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Straight lines have contorted
her once beautiful face.
Your usage of the word contorted was well done. It portrays the emotion much better than other more commonly used words. This was very well written, thank you for sharing it.
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wow. i loved this it was full of emotion.
What of such irony,
to be an assassin's wife.
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This is very clever, and I love the twisted storyline! I'm guessing she thinks he's cheating because he's out searching for the man. Great imagery, and this may sound slightly odd, but the structure of the poem, the shapes it makes in the cantre of the page, I love it! It makes it really interesting to read and it gives the poem that bit extra kick
No idea why though.. 
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A very clever take on a very real truth...we don't always know the entire story. Horrible things, with irrevocable consequences, can happen when we take matters into our own hands. The only thing thing I didn't undestand about the poem, in retrospect, was WHY she thought he was cheating. The reader was not given much information before the deed, other than it alluded to him lying (which fits with the information we were later given; the fact that he was an assassin would DEFINITELY have had him lying to her, to keep his job a secret), but the cheating part...I'm not sure how that would fit, other than, because of his lies, she assumed he was cheating. I LOVE a poem that gives the reader a surprise at the end. Great work, my friend. Also...I want to thank you for reading "Red Hook Revisited-A Requiem," and leaving a comment. As to the poem being hard to read...I know; I just couldn't resist the colors on that background. And I knew that the reader would be able to highlight it, so I've just left it. I may go back, though, and play with the colors, and see if I can get a better contrast, so that it's easier to read. (You're not the first person to mention it, so I'll see if I can correct it.) Thanks, again, for reading
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