i - Love.
Forever, thats what you said.
That our future was written in the stars.
Speaking of the doves that would fly on our wedding day.
That alluring vision you planted in my eager mind.
Your embrace, so warm, so natural.
Velvet boxes filled with diamond encrusted jewelry.
Dreaming of our future, filled with happiness.
Desire causing us to tremble each night.
Admiration and true devotion.
Proving our affections to others.
My own personal infatuation. (Desperation)
ii - Hate
Sickness crawling under my skin,
To think i trusted you!
But tonight, you bore your ugly
disgusting self and showed us
the liar you really are.
With your twisted little mind games,
Leaving my head beyond repair.
You ripped me up, tore me to pieces.
And the hurt i feel now could never be over taken by
any other feeling.
Dont even try to deny what you've done.
Because im living proof of the damage you've caused.
I was your own personal (Dis)advantage.
iii - Murder.
The blood's on my hands this time.
And my paranoia peaks as your body rotts and
a stench grows, manifests from that
shithole i left you in.
Maggots crawling through your half decomposed flesh.
Death was the end of you.
Sin was the end of us.
Our own personal delirium (Delusion).
Ack, Comments?
Comments
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applause-applause-applause...
vivid and raw and
actually quite lovely....
there's a bold strength
in it's honesty....
Consider "touching"
that last line a touch
more...
dark, soft and morbidly
sensuous...
Death was the end of you.
Sin was the end of us.
You're memory like your blood
still tastes moist upon my lips.
(delusion)
my hubbs read your poem
and said...wow...
"don't ever piss her off"
and I replied:
are you kidding...me
that's when she writes the best!
Glutton salute!
ears/Seattle/Kathleen
loved it!
way to write!
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It's good. A lot of imagery and appeal to the sense. A very written piece, I must say. Keep up the good work, (y).
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ist sehr gutte.
i like this a lot but i cant hgelp thinking that it's some kind of threat.... scary. well either way it is good. very powerful and full of emotion.
well have funh thinkin of other tonight while we're away
-nom-
was bored...
-nom some more-
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