What do you see
when you look at me?
Why is that look on your face?
It looks to me
as if you think you can see
a vision of lovely, sweet grace.
I feel myself blush.
The blood seems to rush
from my heart to my face to be seen
by you standing there
running fingers through my hair.
Toward your fire, I am eager to lean.
I see in your eyes
that it’s not a surprise
to find me so tempting a dish.
So I realize
though my mind denies
I’m the answer to all that you wish.
I remember my youth
when, to admit the truth,
I was as lovely as any you’d find.
That you see me such still
gives me such a thrill
even though I realize that you’re blind.
Author notes
"Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?"
-Unknown
A contest entry
- Do you love me...?? (Prompt - Points Increased!) by xPink-Lotusx.
1025 points, ended November 2, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
It's all good.
Comments
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Fantastic!!
This in my opinion is a very spectacular write. This is what I was looking for. This has all the bases covered. Love over time, and the the blindness to the outside shell, and loving what is presented within. Breath taking!
Thank you so much for this powerful write and thank you even more for bringing this into my contest. Wonderful!
I remember my youth
when, to admit the truth,
I was as lovely as any you’d find.
That you see me such still
gives me such a thrill
even though I realize that you’re blind.
That just said it all for me... Well written dear poet.
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Let me give you an example of sour grapes from a 62 year old who should be mature enough not to indulge in such things. You gave me the best review then put me in last place. I am surely glad there were not seven entrants.
Thank you, for the honorable mention.
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Sour grapes can make some good jelly if you add enough sugar. I really enjoyed the piece Linda. I really had a hard time judging this contest. I went back over each and everyone of them even after I commented and I was happy to be able to give you a HM. I wished that I would have had more entries, and a better attitude myself in judging this. I was expecting more of it. And well in spite of my normal judging, I went a long a bit hastily with this one. I do think that you deserved better, and I apologize for the mix up. My brain doesnt always work the way I want it to. I really do appreciate the opportunity to have read such a marvelous piece however, and look forward to reading more of your work while I have time to peruse the site. Thanks once more for the entry, it was indeed a pleasant read. And sorry about the sour grapes, but grapes are grapes you know? Peace and harmony for you, you are a wonderful writer, keep it up.
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