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A Journey

 

 

 

so delicate,  it is
barely there
peaceful ambiguity
and acceptance of all
things will die
but never as beautifully
as an airborne leaf
at six am
when the fragile breath
of the world is still visible
and gently cradles
its fall
to the earth.

 

 

 

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  • miamigirlno1 gold member
    November 4
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    Beautiful

    Wonderful imagery that is soothing to the mind.")


  • Wandering Woman gold member
    November 4
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    Beautiful!

    Lovely and soft like the leaf floating to the earth.


  • sakkthi
    November 4
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    free flow of words.

    wow, how delicate these lines are, passing into me, opens a new world of thought. Thanks.

  • Topnotchsy
    November 3
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    Beautiful imagery here!!


  • white stone
    November 3

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    I needed a current of still peaceful muse right now, so I read again and again. Your words loop delicately, like lace. I feel more of an embrace of the journey than mere acceptance here. Digit digit snap./


  • Daizee silver member
    November 2

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    There are some pieces I read that simply wilt me into a big pile of sighs~~this is one of them. It's graceful, elegant, and almost like a whisper

    • Rowan gold member
      November 4
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      lol, thanks Daizee, I turn into a pile of sighs at least once a day.


  • Kazunan
    November 2

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    Very interesting piece. I never really thought much about death before at least not like that. I like it keep writing.


  • Dark--Soul
    November 2

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    it's great, i only have a question.
    What's "so delicate, it is barely there"? Is it an ambiguity? Journey? Or something else?


  • Aalta
    November 2

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    ah this is amazingly soft and beautiful... deaths are never easy but such a gentle last breath would be a comfort as opposed to the violent deaths of today.

    your description is so alive... I can see the last fall and hear its soft rustle. Enchanting.

    congrats on the feature. a beautiful, beautiful write

    • Rowan gold member
      November 2
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      Thank you, I hadn't realized I was featured, how nice.

  • Clelia
    November 1
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    If only all deaths could be as cradled, comfortable and beautiful as this one.


  • forvermorejpj
    November 1
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    very cool... very sweet....


  • B-n-h
    October 31

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    This is a beautiful short poem I especially liked
    "things will die
    but never as beautifully
    as an airborne leaf"


  • awannabepoet
    October 31

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    Awe such a soft and gentle landing I had coming down from this beautiful tree.

    Thank you so much for sharing and congrats on being featured.

    Have a blessed day.
    awannabepoet


  • Xianaria gold member
    October 31
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    Wow, that was simply lovely!
    A beautiful piece, I love the imagery.

    Congrats on being Today's Poem's Feature!

    ~ Tim


  • Storminbrenda silver member
    October 31
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    So beautiful hon what a pleasure to read well done


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    October 31

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    soft and so magical, in the still quite morning,
    when peace is at it pinnacle, ahh yes you discribe
    this beauty to perfection loved your poem so much..

    Bravo !!! Ms Rowan you are
    Featured in Todays Poem Group,

    love & blessings

    Rend
    Photobucket


  • Peteskid gold member
    October 31

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    yes, it truly helps t see life as part of greater cycles of things, we gain respect for the humble leaf, we learn how humble life can be...PK


  • CaliOkie silver member
    October 31
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    We are all leaves.

    Beautifully written. You always amaze.

    Garrison


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    October 31

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    very beautiful ..."and acceptance of all things will die; but never as beautifully; as an airborne leaf; at six am; when the fragile breath; of the world is still visible; an gently cradles; its fall; to the earth." <---amazingly beautiful! I remember when I started to really focus on writing my poems, I really wanted to write about leaves falling gently to and fro to the ground...just a beautiful image...but never could put it into words as beautiful as the sight of autumn. you did just that! I love it


  • Dalaney gold member
    October 30
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    K, now this is quite simple....beautiful poetry.

    L


  • Cannonsfire
    October 29

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    I think I want to lie down now with this perfect picture in my head...lol but I can't cos I am still waiting for my luggage to touch down in Melbourne ...still this gave me a sense of peace


  • poetryality silver member
    October 29

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    Fall is my favorite season. The image you bring, with such peace, is beautiful. I hear the silence of the moment, and see the vividly colored leaf as it falls. The brevity is perfect for this work of words. Lovely! ~Sigh~


    Love You Always ♥

    Renee


  • just mercedes gold member
    October 29

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    aaaahhhh...

    you share what you see, make universal the particular, let me dance with the leaf

    beautiful


  • Cup-a-Joe
    October 29

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    You blow a breath of fresh air into each word you pen.
    A single moment in time, so well written i can tell you about that leaf.

    Joe


  • Randomly Beautiful
    October 29

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    Gentle and soft, you do as well as shocking and raw. Matt says, he loves how you notice things and capture them...yes! Everyday things we notice turned into something so lovely.


  • philosphyofkate
    October 29

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    Have you ever read The Fall of Freddy the Leaf? My mom used to read it to me and cry and this reminds me of it so much.


  • michael thomas gold member
    October 29

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    We are getting light headed from such loveliness. We credit the poetess for a sensitivity that surpasses the scaled increments. We are into super super sensitivity and we love your poem as divinity.


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    October 29

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    I love how you notice these things and capture them. beautifully written.

    only suggestion: might read smoother with some sort of punctuation after 'and acceptance of all'


  • Allyce May gold member
    October 29

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    breathe/breath?

    This is so very beautiful You even make me like nature writing What is this insanity?! There is a nice contrast, and also mingling, between death and beauty here.


  • manatee
    October 29

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    Nicely done. Especially that you make us feel the distance traveled between birth and rest. - Manatee

    • Rowan gold member
      October 29
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      Thank you manatee, not sure what came over me...
      lol.


  • ccawley gold member
    October 29

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    Such a beautiful image on this rainy Oregon morning.
    Lovely

    • Rowan gold member
      October 29
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      Thanks we've been having lots of dreary wet days too, but this morning the sun came out for a bit, and it was so good to see again.


  • JinSays gold member
    October 29

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    shivers.
    just when I think I've buttonholed you as one specific writer-you go and change on me. I was expecting a whopper at the end, and got one in the form of a soft, and gentle kiss of nature.
    just beautiful. no critiques...I dont ever have anything I can offer you in the way of a critique-you just seem to know exactly what your doing, in order to get your feelings across. Most excellent soft poem for a cold morning like this.
    love,
    jin

    • Rowan gold member
      October 29
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      I know, I must have misplaced my cynicism this morning... I'm sure I'll find it by late afternoon though... hehehe. winks


  • katie marie silver member
    October 29

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    Lovely

    I could see the single leaf slowly drifting to the ground in the early morning haze.

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