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honeymoon

suffering from a bad case
of honeymoon cystitis …
I carefully re-crossed my
legs;  readjusting myself
to get a better view of
London from the upper
deck of our bus.

my mind was blurred
with fairytale visions of
kings, queens, hackney
carriages and gas lamps.

we stepped off the bus
at Hyde Park to be accosted
by a booming cockney accent;
ranting about politics and how
to solve the world’s problems.

I was jerked back to reality
as the dreams disappeared
and the gas lamps and carriages
were ripped from my mind.

I looked up at my husband,
squeezed his hand and said:
“Savoy”?
he said: “Savoy”

we hailed a cab and raced
back to the kings, queens
and gas lamps.

 

 

 

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The Savoy is a hotel in London

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  • PerVirtuous
    November 11

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    it is always a good idea to stay clear of those with cockney accents. Most of the stupidity in the English language comes from there. This was fun and like a little puzzle. As always, it makes the reader think. I likey.


  • poisonivystar4
    November 2

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    It's so nice when your spouse understands you!


  • Desire gold member
    November 2

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    Wow~

    Oh My~ You made me Hungry after reading this
    Wooooo Hooooooo what a trip indeed~
    had to break out the flash
    You sure give the Mind much to feast on~
    Loving this!!
    Keep that quill dancing Yep!
    Shake it fast~
    Thank You for sharing Your Moment
    Best wishes in the contest~
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • penman gold member
    November 2

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    Excellent

    Oh you can make anything so poetic and amazing. This was so amazing. Best of luck in the contest


  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 1

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    An interesting write for an interesting contest...Thanks for sharing your honeymoon jaunt to London..hmmm...So talented you are at everything you write, niece..All the best in the contest..know that is no problem! a.


  • nordicsky silver member
    October 31

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    Hi,
    I hope you are enjoying my wonderful city. I know you will have loads of ideas, but here are three of my favourites.
    The south bank... the Globe Theatre, National Theatre, Tate Bankside and, best of all, loads of people enjoying themselves in a carnival atmosphere.
    Greenwhich Park...The Observatory, boat trips, and fine views across London
    Richmond Park... A vast open parkland with large herds of deer and amazing autumn colours.

    Whatever, I'm sure you will have a wonderful honeymoon.
    p.s. try cranberry juice.

    Kind regards, Peter


    • Amera gold member
      October 31
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      LOL

      "try cranberry juice."
      OK, will do!

  • this makes me smile i mean it was something, i liked it kind of like you have a image of what something will be before you get there but when you see it, lol, keep it flowing


  • Dalaney gold member
    October 30

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    i like that you are doing free verse...
    honeymoon cystitis...ha....you crack me up
    I also love your humor...needed this smile today.
    Love ya

  • ea silver member
    October 30
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    Hope you're enjoying your honeymoon in London.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    October 30
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  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 29

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    The top of the world is what you deserve, I suppose the Savoy will have to suffice.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    October 29

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    Oi, Oi Savoy!

    Nice job Amera..."London swings like a pendulum do, bobbies on bicycles two by two, West Minster Abby and the tower of Big Ben, and rosy red cheeks of the little children."


    All the best my dear.

  • CasusVir gold member
    October 29

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    I really like this one Amera. Maybe it makes me think of what could have been for me. I've always enjoyed poems that pull emotions out of you as this did. Good luck in the contest it should do well.


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    October 29

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    excellent

    Oh I loved this too
    I am an old romantic at heart too and would think of the grand days like you as well
    Penned perefectly sweetie
    Best of luck in the contest
    I posted a new one hope you come see me too
    Hugs n love
    Susan~~~~

  • Topnotchsy
    October 29

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    I hope your honeymoon lasts the rest of your life. Nice write.


  • Rovingone gold member
    October 29

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    Ah, the fun of a honeymoon in Merry Ol England. Did ja pop in at the pub and take in Picadilli? Sweet, charming little bit of reminisence you penned here.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    October 29

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    You certainly know how to pick a base from which to enjoy the sights of London from ... even if only in dreams
    An excellent FV and a joy to read.

    All the best in the contest

    Love
    Sue


  • John BoSox
    October 29

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    It's almost like you took me to London with you..I actually loved this poem..so refreshing..The imagery is super, as is the entire poem..congrats


    John


  • Cup-a-Joe
    October 29

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    The only things more beautiful than your writing... is your face and heart.
    Love this.

    Joe


  • Black Narcissus gold member
    October 29

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    Very enjoyable to read. I've been to London hundreds of times but have never even seen the Savoy. When I first read your poem I misread it as ' Saveloy ' .

    Isn't there any style in which you can't write extremely well


  • JinSays gold member
    October 29

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    Okay, see? I knew you could write FV. I knew it, and know what else? You do it really well. I would love to see this place one day, but probably wont be doing it on a honeymoon. Excellent writing here. Love,
    jin


    • Amera gold member
      October 29
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      hehe... thanks, Emma ordered me to do it.


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    October 29

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    I noticed your comment..from this write I would swear that this was a true event..as always your imagery is great..you brought the reader to london..thanks for the AN..I was trying to fiqure out the "savoy" thing..was not sure how metaphorically "savor" might be..Splendid Job
    Much love and Life..David


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 29

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    Very you, and a perfect fit for my city

    You are turning into a real FV poet!

    Great stuff

    Jeff


  • Emmyb gold member
    October 29

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    hehe i love your authors notes yes. yes it is!

    awww hackney. I got one of my tattoos in some backstreet in Hackney once. Its a bad bad bad place but its sooo london.

    much more london than all those kings and queens!


    I mean... you have to feel a little sorry for the queen. She is here for tourism. Thats it. Soooo many people want to come and see her and yet she is a little old lady who does nothing at all.

    I suppose if it brings the money in then theres no harm



    i like what youve done here amera - really capturing some parts of london which you would only know about if you had been here or just gone to wikipedia and had a read!
    hyde park corner can be daunting especially if you just want to come and look at the sites. I only went there once in the 2 years ive lived here and i could only appreciate it because i was proud to live in such a vocal community. though if i were on holiday i may have just wanted to have a drink at the savoy too!


    oh the savoy. . . how i wish i could afford to spend a night there


    lovely poem


    Emma

    • Amera gold member
      October 29
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      You’re right; I’ve never been to London, I went to the Internet and found a hotel I would like. LOL

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