The kid next door was so uncool,
He often stares at me in school.
He catches bugs in early spring,
And always sits by me in swing.
There was a time, we’re at the zoo,
He said he wants to be my boo.
I just ignored those things he said,
Too naive for what lies ahead.
The kid next door urged on his chase,
He soon commenced on his first base.
He gave me sweets for one whole week,
And then he kissed me on my cheek.
Time swiftly stopped. He turned it off.
Confused, appalled, I wiped it off.
I ran from him, went to my room,
And told my doll about my doom.
The boy next door pursued his quest,
I’m so impressed, he did his best.
He sent me gifts and letters too,
Until I think I like him too.
And then one day he asked me out,
Replied my ‘yes’, without a doubt.
We started strolling at the park,
Ended up kissing in the dark.
The moon’s up high, it’s getting late,
He sadly dropped me at my gate.
I pledged to him, more dates to deal,
We bid goodnights with our own seal.
The guy next door was just so sweet.
He surely knocks me off my feet.
He set a date down by the sea,
Preparing for his vital plea...
He grabbed my hand, got on his knee
And raised a velvet box to me.
My tears fell down, too dazed to see
A golden ring waiting for me.
The guy next door sets me on fire.
He truly holds my heart’s desire.
He utterly fulfilled my life.
Well, obviously, I’m now his wife.
Author notes
I usually write depressing/sad poems. This one was my first 'happy' poem. By the way, this is not real, I just made it up. 
I hope you like it.
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You know you should write more of this... It was so sweet and fulfilling, joyous story.... obviously ... made me smile. This is simply beautiful... or maybe that's too mild a word.
The rhyme worked so well... just perfect. and the images it conjures up are great, like the fairy tales.... scene after scene.
Its true you just made it up but its so good it could be true...
Thank you for sharing this,
all the best
-Aalta
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this is gorgeous! every stanza was adorable and heart-filled joy
perfect for the contest of Kath's and really I haven't read rhyme in awhile but I like poems just like this that can rhyme well without over doing it : ) an excellent, beautifully touching story written here! wonderfully penned : D
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What a fab story and so sweet. I loved the beginning, because it's something I think we all go through....the end was lovely too.
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awww...I wanted it to be real. It sounded real! very sweet boy next door poem, what girl wouldn't want such a devoted single-minded guy. Very light and uplifting. nice pen =)
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Wow! =O !!!
The rhyme here is absolutely superb! I must say you've quite surprised me. This is such a lighthearted tale and I had expected more deep thoughts and emotions. But this is amazing, it immediately played out in my mind so vividly I could almost touch it! Its so cute and really appealing. Thank you so much!
Bravo and thank you for entering
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Well I clicked on the green writing and it took me to some search place. Not sure if that's what you intended
I think stanza 7 would make more sense if it read 'Hwe sadly dropped me at my gate'...rather than 'He sadly dropped me off my gate' It sounds like he dropped you from the gate to the ground like some inanimate object
I think it's great that you wrote something positive Good on you!
A cute story and I enjoyed the read
gaylene
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This made me giggle a little bit... very familiar to something that happened to me with the guy next door... however it did not end in marriage, not such a happy tale admittedly but the general idea was there... very well written... so cute..
Thanks so much for entering and best of luck in the contest... x -
Fabulous with great rhyme it made me smile all the way through !
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I love it, starts out as what seems to be an impossible quest for the boy but then turns to a tale of love. Amazing read.
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This poem has a child-like feel as if it were written by a young inexperienced teen. I'm not sure why some of the lines were green - that threw me off a little. In the fourth stanza off and off do not rhyme because they are the same word - the same thing in the fifth stanza with too and too.
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This is so sweet and so romantic. It does have a wonderful feel to it. Not all poems are autobiographical many just come to us out of the mist. Our muses quietly at work.
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A lovely bit of fun looking into the head of a woman as she reminisces..great stuff...Dan
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This is true love. Good luck and you've been invited to the next round. Keep writing!!
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Wow!!!! I have read so many love poems, but this one actually is the most amazing one by far. I loved every line of this one and can see the love flowing, from the well chosen words. Thank you so much for sharing. Good luck in the contest. Take care and have a great day.
Sandi -
Aww this poem is from start to finish fabulously done!!! I loved every word of it! You are a very talented writer indeed and best of luck to you! The flow was perfected and the rhyming was great!!!! Nicely done. Have a wonderful day.
Sincerely,
Sarah
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