We struggle for control
and usually don't know it.
It's a fabric of our soul,
yet we often don't show it.
Relationships prevail
because it's at the core.
We all know to well
someone's keeping score.
Oh we may not fight
scream, bitch and moan,
we lay down at night
unsure who holds the throne.
Control is fuel for the soul!
A contest entry
- Night Quickie by Hope Angel.
400 points, ended October 29, 10 entries
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Comments
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I guess when we look hard enough, there is always someone taking the point, but it may change from day to day. In relationships or in the bigger world, it always seems a natural thing for someone to lead and someone to follow. Then there are some who cannot live without being in control and they are the ones who are a problem. Another well said write.
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Fabulous write I love your rhymes! good luck in the contest
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This is real nice. XD
I like your opening stanza:
We struggle for control
and usually don't know it.
It's a fabric of our soul,
yet we often don't show it.
I also love the lines:
Oh we may not fight
scream, bitch and moan,
we lay down at night
unsure who holds the throne.
And my most favorite line of course is the very ending itself.
"Control is fuel for the soul!"
Damn impressive I must say. Best of luck in the contest =]
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