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Who We Are

I’m the girl you love to hate
Hurting me makes you feel great
I don’t know why it’s your goal
To keep me from feeling whole

I’m the boy you love to tease
Doing whatever you please
You make my life a living hell
For I don’t fit your standards well

We’re the ones you just can’t stand
From your kindness we are banned
Into your world we just don’t fit
So you tear us apart bit by bit

I’m the girl who shouldn’t be
I’m the boy proud to be me
We’re the ones who’re shunned by life
I’m the girl who wants a wife

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  • okwriter94
    8 hours ago
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    Thats really good. I can relate to this. Thank you so much for sharing.


  • punkrockfairy23
    November 13
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    this poem is a truly amazing poem, and what i love bout it the most it fits my standards completly, i thougth you put great feeling into this poem. it was beautiful, and i cant wait for the more to come


  • punkrockfairy23
    November 13
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    i loved this, its great


  • xxAngelXLiesxx
    November 3

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    Great poem! I just loved it, I was a bit confused on it at first but the last line I got it! Lolz... Anyhoo, it was good. Keep up the good work!


  • beautiful lady
    November 2

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    i loved it

    i understand the meanig of this poem clearly. honestly sometimes i read a poem and i have no idea wht the hell i just read lol anyway im gonna look into reading more of ur wrk looking foward to any new poems.

    P>S
    i showed this poem to my wifey and to my surprise she loved it takes a lot to get her to read this poems so thts props frm us to u lol

    later, lily

    rhyming is a plus


  • longing4yourtouch
    November 2

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    Awsome! I love the way it all flows together. I really liked the beginning and end. cleverly written! keep it up.


  • kaylalala
    October 29

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    wow

    i like this its very good keep up the good work but i'm kind of confused on the last line in the poem what are you talking about? lol


  • novacaine.
    October 29

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    Another amazing piece. I love last two stanzas. && the last line was pretty unexpected, so point for that too. I'm starting to think that maybe I should read some more of your work.


  • lovedxinxsighs
    October 29

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    lol the very last line "I'm the girl who wants a wife" was delightfully unexpected. It has an adorable ring that just makes you wanna giggle.Idk why, but it did for me.
    Anyway! Your poem flows pretty well together as a whole and the message is clear as a bell. So you know what I think!? I think you've done a wonderful job! Woo! This is definately who we are


  • babygirl2582 silver member
    October 29

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    I love this!!!!!

    I have a boyfriend and a girlfriend we all happily live together.... OH the stares LOL... Amazing piece... So often the world shuns us for our life choices...


    My favorite part is

    "We’re the ones you just can’t stand
    From your kindness we are banned
    Into your world we just don’t fit
    So you tear us apart bit by bit

    I’m the girl who shouldn’t be
    I’m the boy proud to be me
    We’re the ones who’re shunned by life
    I’m the girl who wants a wife"

    I like how it all comes together... Again amazing piece...

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